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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
rather frightening imagery. very well written, very descriptive
one thing though. paragraph line breaks... when you change subject, scene, person speaking there should be a new paragraph and a few blank lines between them. it makes it so much easier to read and it makes it prettier too!
good beginning, looking forward to reading more.
thank you,
ginny
one thing though. paragraph line breaks... when you change subject, scene, person speaking there should be a new paragraph and a few blank lines between them. it makes it so much easier to read and it makes it prettier too!
good beginning, looking forward to reading more.
thank you,
ginny