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February 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The plot sounds familiar. I really think you should get a beta. Perhaps someone to look over your spelling, punctuation, and grammar errors. I noticed quite a few of them and that can take away from the flow of any story. Perhaps adding some details to your story as well.
Your story isn't horrible, but it really sounds Hannah Montana-ish. But, with an amazing author you can turn the phonebook into something that belongs on the best seller list. You've only written one chapter so it's hard to judge your story quite yet.
I don't want to come off as flaming you. I do not want to discourage you from writing or finishing this fic. Writing is a very hard art to do well. I think you could really benefit with a beta. Someone that will also help out with ideas if you hit writer's block. Please continue to work on this. You'll only get better as you write more.
Your story isn't horrible, but it really sounds Hannah Montana-ish. But, with an amazing author you can turn the phonebook into something that belongs on the best seller list. You've only written one chapter so it's hard to judge your story quite yet.
I don't want to come off as flaming you. I do not want to discourage you from writing or finishing this fic. Writing is a very hard art to do well. I think you could really benefit with a beta. Someone that will also help out with ideas if you hit writer's block. Please continue to work on this. You'll only get better as you write more.