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December 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I really like it keep up the good work :D
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September 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful
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September 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Not bad, not bad at all. Keep writing. The more we write, the better we get. The lemon doesn't 'suck' at all, on the contrary. Your story is good. I'd rate it a 9 on the scale of 1 to 10. I did find that the ending, where Sango & Miroku come in, though, needed a few more comments. We all know just how much of a lecher the monk is, now, don't we.Looking forward to reading more of your stuff.
Luv ya & leave ya; JA NE.
Luv ya & leave ya; JA NE.
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September 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG that was sooooo funny at the end.
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September 11, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I thought you did a pretty good job (pardon the pun) for your first time. You also did an excellent job in making this story a oneshot with no way of possibly becoming a full story--you told your story. I'll be looking forward to reading more of your works.