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Abandond

Interesting story. I can't wait to read more. Keep up the great work.

Wow!!! I loved it! I have so many questions, but like you said they will be answered in more chapters. I cannot wait until your next update.

Happy New Years,
Chanda

a very interesting story you have already woven. i like the newcommer (i'm hesitant to call him a bad guy, only because we don't know his motive), but he seems to be an interesting character. i'm impressed when someone can devise their own villian and write an actual personality to the character (you don't see it often) but you have me hooked already. i also like the Miroku that you've written; he parallels the canon one very well. Your story is awesome, out to what seems to be a great start! Keep it going!

its really good
please continue

Hey guys! Work on the 2nd chapter has been slow but steady. While I'm nervous bout attempting lemons, I'm definetly gonna ty to hook everyone up with some sprite in the next chapter or 2. Thanks for the moves/names definitions. I was really only looking for the Jap names cause I've seen every episode (atleast I think I have) and the movies and such, just I couldn't remember spelling of moves in Jap. Thanks for the nice reviews as well, I try my best to make sure its as error free as possible and very descritptive as well. I might have trouble with the love parts, but I know I'll have some kick ass fighting in there. I'm kind of scared though cause The chpter about Zanshi's past will kill me...not a might...it will lol. Oh and tell me if you guys like my portrayal of the characters? Trying to keep them as close to the real deal as possible. Hope you grow to like Zanshi as well.

I really enjoy writing stories for this site and I hope that I'll become a respectable author...maybe even win some IYFG awards sometime too...whenever they allow me in lol.

Oh ya and EQ was the bomb. I'd still take over WoW and stuff nowadays. I was a 66 Bst Lord. Never really ound time to push to 70. Maybe sometime lol...

you have Sango's weapon right her other is the katana she keeps at her side.. Miroku's is the Kazaana, Inuyasha's Tessaiga.

There's the ademant barrage... which i know i've spelled wrong in this comment... i'm out of it today forgive me... Windscar, Iron Rever Soul Stealer... Red tessaiga,Backlash wave, Blades of blood... and a few more.. but i'm so tired.. i didn't tell you the jap. names for his because i honestly don't want to spell them wrong.. you can find the information on anime sites i'm sure...

Nice story so far... I hope inuyasha doesn't stay ignorant for too long. His feelings do mean something to her.

I wasn't sure if you were looking for the Japanese or English versions of moves so I'll include both. These are taken directly from Wikipedia

Iron Reaver Soul Stealer also known as Exorcising claws of steel: Sankon Tesso(u)
Blades of Blood: Hijin Kesso(u) the (U) Is used instead of the - above the vowel (ô)

Weapons:
Wind Scar: Kaze no Kizu
Explosive flowing wave, also known as the backlash wave: bakuryûha
Barrier shatter also known as the red Tessaiga (The usage of Tetsusaiga is a preference either would be correct)
Diamond spear wave also known now as the Adamant barrage: Kongôsôha here the ô is used instead of the (U)
Dragon scaled Tessaiga(Tetsusaiga): Ryûrin no (Tessaiga)Tetsusaiga

Other:
Beads of Subjugation : Kotodama no Nenju
Sit: Osuwari

Inuyasha's clothing in a historical text:
Kosode: His undershirt
Hitoe: His jacket or fire rat robe
Hakamas: Pants
Fundoshi: Traditional attire for under garments
Obi: His belt

A lot of times you will see the use of 'ou' rather than 'ô' or 'û' either can be used as it gives the reader a sense of how the word is pronounced. The usage of tsus for Tessaiga you will find both versions in stories, and both are correct..one I am sure is more "accurate" than the other, however I use Tessaiga as that is how the word is pronounced, where tsus is the way you would form the word on your mouth. I hope this helps you out.

Good story so far, I look forward to the next chapter

Not sure what happened with the - above the vowel thing, but it isn't supposed to look like the roof of a house, rather was supposed to be a flat line above the vowel...maybe they don't have that option here. Sorry bout that.

Wow! An Inuyasha fan and played EQ, that's me! My main character was a lvl 70 wizzie. Cool, nice to meet you.
Good start, keep going, looking forward to see how it progresses :).