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CONTINUE LOVING THE FANFICTION

This Is getting soooo good plz update I love this storie. . .I hope you update soon. Good job ^ ^ *smiles*

PLEASE update soon! I really like it!!!!!

Not a bad start. FYI: In chapter 2 it should read 'knight in shining armor'. After all you are refering to k-nig-hts and not that part of the day when it's dark out and most people are asleep.

The story is a really good idea. The writing is done well, too. Just a few constructive criticisms, though :} The story woud be a lot greater and much more captivating if there was more description. Like when Kagome comes out of the well, she just seems to suddenly appear at a hot spring. There could be a lot more description about how she got there (even if it just states that she stumbles through the forest).

The title should probably be 'Trying to Banish Every Memory' instead of banished. I assume that was just a mistake, though, since your writing is fine. To be honest, though, if I had noticed that before I read the story, I wouldn't have bothered reading. I think most people would do the same thing.

I really look forwards to more of this story, it looks great!

Ok, great beginning. What happens next? I hope it's a sappy, happy ending. Please update.

Thanks;
Patty

I have to agree that a prologue that short isn't nearly enough to stir up any kind of interest.
And in the end of the prologue, you changed the tense from imperfect to present.
Otherwise, well written. Keep going, I want to see if you really can write :) At least the beginning was promising.

i didn't get to see enough of what your plot could be... please, add another chapter.. make it long too.. realizing this is a prologue, i know that they are usually short but, please make it longer and give me as well as other readers an idea.

i was pleased at the lack of spelling issues. ^_^but should it not be.. 'Trying to banish every memory'? just thought i would ask.