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August 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
she is a black widow spider.... how mean.
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August 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
omfg thats was awsome plz update soon
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August 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I can soooo see it! It was so funny looking forward to reading more soon.
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August 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god... that was so funny... you definitely need to add more to this... deep down, I always knew that Naraku was a total failure.
The only prominent problem that I found with it, was that you continuously mixed up 'course' with 'coarse'. For example, several times you used the phrase: 'of coarse', when it should have been 'of course.' I am not saying this to be mean, and I hope you don't take it that way. I am just trying to give you a little constructive advice, since I know that the spell/grammar check function on many programs does not always catch those types of errors; especially since the word is spelled correctly, just not used in the proper context. I hope there are no hard feelings.
I am going to continue reading this story, because it is outrageously funny and uniquely original. All in all I think you did a great job. Keep up the great work, and I look forward to reading more of this story in the future. (I can't wait to see what your special agent has to say about my favorite demon lord (Sesshomaru) and his hot-headed half brother.)
sincerely,
sesshys_jaded_samuri
The only prominent problem that I found with it, was that you continuously mixed up 'course' with 'coarse'. For example, several times you used the phrase: 'of coarse', when it should have been 'of course.' I am not saying this to be mean, and I hope you don't take it that way. I am just trying to give you a little constructive advice, since I know that the spell/grammar check function on many programs does not always catch those types of errors; especially since the word is spelled correctly, just not used in the proper context. I hope there are no hard feelings.
I am going to continue reading this story, because it is outrageously funny and uniquely original. All in all I think you did a great job. Keep up the great work, and I look forward to reading more of this story in the future. (I can't wait to see what your special agent has to say about my favorite demon lord (Sesshomaru) and his hot-headed half brother.)
sincerely,
sesshys_jaded_samuri