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by lovelikewinter320

person MissMurder111
schedule July 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I remember this one to!!!! Loving it so far!!!! keep it up!!!! Update soon!!!!
schedule July 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
are ye going to finish this ???

i really think that you should because
this has a lot of potential HERES a hint however...

it might be in your best interest to find a beta for spelling
and grammar ... or go and edit it youself.

other than that it has a good start. Try to make your chapters
longer and include more forshadowing to the plot as well.
That makes people want to continue reading and go back whenever
you update.


^_^