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for Under The Stars

by XxstealerxX

person genia
schedule January 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
well that had to be the most intersting thing i ever have read but if you want my advice you need to think out the story more its just so right there that its dull.theres no detail or any kind of how do i put it?essence is the word! you have a talent i can see it but you dont know how to use it properly. its like your story has no purpose or something. well over all you did good but you need to keep trying at it.
person Mystic fire
schedule January 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like your story, it's alright...You need to set a plot though and make the chapters longer...I'm sick of getting good stuff in small doses...Oh and to Anon...Your an idiot. What the hell I mean do you think it makes you look smart when you cuss someone out online? Get a life you loser. *Rolls eyes*
person Dark Inuyasha
schedule January 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Its good, but it could be a lot better, Im glad that you killed Kouga, make it permanent please :p. And hte chapters are a lil short, but its still good. Update plz :P.

Dark
person INuyashaDreamGirl
schedule January 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey this is a very good story i hope INuyasha fucking kills narakus ass once and for all.....lol.

well update,

thanks

~IDG
person lilpuppygirl
schedule January 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE update this is so good!!!!
person inu5
schedule January 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
good but it need more so harry up with the next chapter.
person pat
schedule January 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
COME ON man i want no need more to read
plz update today soooooooooooooooon
like now would be nice real nice come on plz
UPDATE!!!!
person pat
schedule December 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
sounds good plz contine on
person inuyasha
schedule December 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It was good but it need a lot more so herry up with the next chapter.
person Anon
schedule December 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
How old are you? 12 or 13? You can't write worth dick. Your story sucks.