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All in all, I'm going to score you as good. I'm not an author for good reason. (I'm good at tweaking, terrible at creating from scratch. This is why I'm a cosmetologist, I'm great at expanding what's already there, but give me a blank sheet of paper, and nothing.) I unfortunately do have to agree with you about your lemon, it was clinical. You had what was happening, but nothing about how anyone felt about it. 

Basically, your whole story has real potential. Simply being more emotional as well as more descriptive and visceral would help a lot. My favorite main stream published author, Diana Gaboldon( Outlander),  made a wonderful book titled 'I Give You My Body' that I think would help you immensely. It's literally an entire book about writing lemons. 

Please give this story about pass and give it the credit that it truly deserves. 

good ending.. but that last picture was never reveiled.. :(

so.... what was on the last page of the journal? it was never actually said.... and what happend with Kagomes and Inuyashas kids? When is it that Miroku and Sango died and finally what really happend with Rin and Seshomaru? I think that your fic was really good at the beginng but the last couple of chapters were a bit lacking but that's normally what happens when someone finishes a fic... it's hard to do it's it? anyways, if you wanna drop me an email or IM you can contact me at inuyasha_1234@hotmail.com or nekoyoukaihanyou for aim.... i really enjoyed your fic even though the first of my comments may not seem like it, you should keep writting and who knows where it will take you!

that was freaking awsome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

wait... did inu and kag kill themselves?

wut was the last page of the journal? did they ever see it?

This was good so pleaze finish it.

that kicked assssss!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! you gotta atleast make one more!!! Daaammmnnnnniiiiiittttt, mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmoooooooooooooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

That was asume! I loved what you did, i think that is how it should and might end in the show. Anyway, i hope that u make another chapter soon. Email me when u do. Lata!

WOW!! NOW I REALLY I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENED