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Hey, your writing format seemed to change! On your last chapter, the first half was comprised of good sized-paragraphs, not the usual, single sentences. This is good - apply this tactic to all preceding chapters and whamu, everything will look much better.

Alrighty, in response to the "critical acclaim" section... I think we should all remember that A: the author can write whatever the hell she wants, and the story is in NO WAY misrepresented by the summary, and that B: the point of this story, (as I've understood it) is that the author is trying to write an outlandish/dirty/crazy/dark plot. She has succeeded. While I can't say I agree with the actions of the characters or that I even TRY to contemplate the veracity of the story line, it's her prerogative to do what she wants with the characters as long as it's understood that Rumiko Takahashi owns them. Everyone who cannot understand the concept of literary freedom, (even when you might find the subject matter repulsive), needs to look more carefully at what they're reading before they begin.

all in all a happy ending

ok...wow...i dont know if i can say i like it, or hate it. cuz man thats pretty fucked up. your story has a few loose ends though.

I only have one comment to this whole thing. Note: I refuse to call it a story, because there is no story here. When were you planning on actually writing a story for this title. Usually that would require a plot and some kind of story line rather than just a bunch of strung together chapters that relate nothing more than blood, death, abuse, killing, rape, and insanity. If this were rated on a scale of one to ten, I would have to give it a minus 10 for total lack of anything remotely resembling a plot and little to almost no explanations or reasons for anything other than Kagome's supposed over use of the 'sit' command.

It is more than obvious that even you were put out a bit by your own efforts by the sudden and totally inexplained ending. Perhaps if you had actually wrote a story, you might have been more motivated to continue this fic. It is a good thing, however, that you ended it, because it most certainly is apparent that your writing abilities are sorely lacking. If this is the best you can do, then I pity your efforts in English class.

Oh! An if you feel better about yourself by adding this to another of your little chapters of reviewer responses, by all means do so. If this is the only way that you can make yourself feel better about your lack of skill and effort, then more is the pity for you. If you would take the time to try to actually write something and write it from the heart, instead of just a bunch of words on paper, you might actually be a good writer. Even if the story is angsty, it would still make a difference. Perhaps if you tried that approach, you might surprise yourself.

Well...I just learnt one thing in this AFF...The more violence ..crazier the story...the more readers you got. It doesn't matter about the story is good or bad. What they want just the fucking and raping business. Inuyasha is some mediator only unfortunately...in your story. No wonder I found only a few talented and good writer in here. You may be feel you got the talent...but you also got the talent to brainwash all the reader who read your story to become a rapist. It's aint funny! Hey...that's your right as Author same as my right as reviewer...

Did you actually think you could post something this offensive and not get any negative feedback? Do you believe that your writing is so brilliant and infalliable that you are somehow exempt from criticism? You think THIS is resistance?! I should report you to GAFF, my whiny friend. Try countering your less-than-satisfied reviewers' points instead of starting a flame war. Would it kill you to ATTEMPT to write Inuyasha and company in character instead of petulantly mocking anyone with useful comments? Personally, I'd be worried that my fic had attracted that many sickos. Fans of this story, you want to explain exactly what's so wonderfully original and well-developed about this story? Random violence does not equal good dark!fic. There's nothing remotely appealing about "Hate" except pure shock value. It's extremely formulatic, predictable, shallow, and quite frankly, BORING.

"Thank you. That's exactly what I was going for." So in other words, you weren't at all interested in improving your skills as a writer, entertaining fellow fans, or exploring a unique concept. Nah, you just wanted to piss people off. And maybe I missed something, but it looks like you made some of those flames up yourself.

Hey, man. Nice! It's so nice that you just take all those bad reveiws. If they were for one of my fics, I probably would have cried. xD;; But yeah, I'm sure you didn't expect evvvveryone to like it. But it's good, and if people don't like it.. they shouldn't read it. Get over it.

It was truly wonderful writing. Just please the next time you write, make it slightly less sadistic.

Whoever Kiyana Va Sala is, I thought you might like to know I am your personal fan. I just
loved your 5 Myths of Life. But back to the story, it was truly beautiful in a dark sick way. Please do write more
but with slightly less descriptive gore.