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August 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
these kagome x KOUGA pairings are worthless an if u must degrade everyone atleast spell his name right oh btw theres a reason no one does these u know
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April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW!!!! That was great!!!! I hope you'll wite more!!!!!!!! And GREAT lemon!!!!!!!!!!
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April 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
thnx for all the reviews so far
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April 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i need more reviews.....
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April 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
yes!! very great! i loved it... although there aren't as many kag/kog pairings, there are a few... anyhow, again ( i just told this to someone else) if you were to have a good summary, then it would totally boost your hits/reviews. and i really think that even tho this is prolly intended to be a one-shot, you could go ahead and make a full story out of it! go ahead! everyone is sucked in my a lemon in the first chapter!
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April 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*cough* ...by. not 'my a lemon'... it was a typo... i should reread these things before i post... ><
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April 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I liked it!!!
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April 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not bad. But I felt like I was reading a teaser, like you just wanted to type it and get it out of the way. You seem like the sort of author that has potential but just doesn't feel like putting in the time to fine tune the story, or doesn't HAVE the time to do so. Even if it is a pain in the ass to spend hours on a short story to nitpick it to death, it always turns out better when you change even the smallest details. And you feel better about it when you're finished, too. A couple suggestions:
1. If you come up with any ideas, expand on the story. Take the time to explain HOW Kouga and Kagome got to that point. When we get to know them beforehand, the romance scene itself is better because we're more attached to the characters.
2. Use the Spellcheck, if your computer has one, to catch any words that you misspell. I only noticed a couple typos, which is common for anyone. So that's not a jab at your grammar skills. Still, catching and fixing any of them beforehand helps the story. Even if you have to deal with Spellcheck repeatedly flagging "Inuyasha" and trying to replace it with "Natasha"...
That said, I hope you do continue to write, either new stories or expanding on this one. I'll definitely keep reading :)
1. If you come up with any ideas, expand on the story. Take the time to explain HOW Kouga and Kagome got to that point. When we get to know them beforehand, the romance scene itself is better because we're more attached to the characters.
2. Use the Spellcheck, if your computer has one, to catch any words that you misspell. I only noticed a couple typos, which is common for anyone. So that's not a jab at your grammar skills. Still, catching and fixing any of them beforehand helps the story. Even if you have to deal with Spellcheck repeatedly flagging "Inuyasha" and trying to replace it with "Natasha"...
That said, I hope you do continue to write, either new stories or expanding on this one. I'll definitely keep reading :)