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April 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a great story. Please Please Please Please update soon.
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April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hahahahahahaha poor InuYasha
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April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh, goody, do continue.
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April 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow.. keep going i really like this story so far! *applause*
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April 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hi this is good you better not abandon your fic i cant waite to read what happends to kagome and inuyasha
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March 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
PPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^date SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I really really really really really really really really really really want 2 c wut happens next!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Plus I like this story so far!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THANX!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^_^
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March 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Be strong, resist cliche. Inuyasha loves junk food in general, not just ramen. Also, you seemed to have him clearly just outside the hut in the first few sentences and, suddenly, in the clearing by the hanging corpse. Which would've dropped with a messy thud. Not just subsided with a stink. Corpses being the unwieldy things that they are.
And, please, no gratuitous screaming. Inuyasha is a clueless jerk; not a squalling idiot. It's bad enough finding a cluless jerk attractive, but a squalling idiot? Depends on whether or not you intend doing satire rather than romance. You've got such a promising beginning and a perfectly good name for your fic. Don't fall apart now when you're, what, a thousand words in?
If I didn't like it I wouldn't be poking you.
And, please, no gratuitous screaming. Inuyasha is a clueless jerk; not a squalling idiot. It's bad enough finding a cluless jerk attractive, but a squalling idiot? Depends on whether or not you intend doing satire rather than romance. You've got such a promising beginning and a perfectly good name for your fic. Don't fall apart now when you're, what, a thousand words in?
If I didn't like it I wouldn't be poking you.
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March 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good story thus far, I think you should try to add more to each chapter. I think that I would lose intrest without more in each chapter. I'm not saying longer chapter. Just make sure that everything you wanted to say in each chapter is said.
my son just got hurt i'll finish review later sorrry
my son just got hurt i'll finish review later sorrry
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March 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey thiis is good please continue soon would like to see how one of your Inu/Kag lemons are.
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March 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh wow, uh oh. Poor Inuyasha, Poor Kagome. I hope he shows up next chapter being the big hero. Nice job about the Raman! Update Soon!