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The story summary looked very interesting but the story is very confusing. If Naraku raped when she was alive, how could she have found out she was pregnant by Naraku when she died afterward he raped her & was no longer living on earth? How did she give birth to her daughter & take care of her for 5 years in the living world if she'd been gone from the living world for only a year? Why would Naraku rape her but not take the 1/2 of the jewel that she carried? How come she's a wolf cat demon with 4 eyes as queen of the underworld? Sessh's sister is a wolf fox & knows Kagome, in Kagome's demon form? If Kagome's wolfdog, Kuro, is actually part of her then how could she kill it, like it was afraid she would before Sessh showed up? What is her daughter, who was fathered by Naraku ? I'm confused and there are a bunch of things I don't understand.

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?

hey great story and can't wait for more even though I am a patient woman it needs more lemon in it and can't wait to see what happens next with kagome and when they will fight naraku again and when sesshoumaru and kagome get it on cause you are leaving me in suspense and in its killing me to know what happens next so please update soon and you also need to be careful in your spelling I know this sounds harsh but if you need any help in your spelling just let me know you can e-mail me here at the site or at my e-mail address Buffy_2018@yahoo.com cause I will gladly help you in your spelling cause I am a college graduate in english and writing so if you need any help in anyway with your story or stories I will gladly help it is no problem at all just let me know I am always on the this site and I am always checking my e-mail every day.

Signed inu-girl3000

P.S. My real name is Nicole and I live in America on the west coast of California.As for typing my e-mail you have to capitalize the"B" in Buffy and you need to under score after the "Y" just to let you know cuase I have had other people type it wrong so that it will help you well gotta go now. chaio.

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

this is a very good stroy and i can not wait to read more! please update soon!

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!!

I think you need to invest in a spell checker. that, or an editor. there were a good number of misspellings and typos. you also seem to have a problem with plurals... instead of using just plain s, you use 's, which is only suppose to be used for certain conjunctions, and possessives such as : "it's 5 o'clock, Mary's alarm clock will be going off soon." a few examples of words you've used with unneeded apostrophies: eyes, places, things, years, and so on. you also have problems with the words "their", "there", and "they're". you've been using the word "their" when you should have used "there", the word "there" being a location marker, and "their" being a posessive for groups of 2 or more beings, and then there's "they're" which is a conjunction of "they are". I appologize if this may all seem confusing... one of these days, I'm going to post stuff like this on a website and just review with the link. XD other than these things, It's an interesting story idea... I'd elaborate some more on this, but I'm just sooooo tired>.<