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December 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ahh you updated! I was beginning to think you never would lol im so glad you did :-D your story is great, i hope you keep up with it!
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October 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hey... ive just read your story for the fist time, well it just to say that your 10 first chapter are great and I hope that the next chapter is coming soon...pretty soon. Well talk to you later!!!
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October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ok, here's the thing... this story has potential, alot of potential. it has a very interesting plot, but...
"The score between them; all years Inuyasha been on the football team they won and the mourn been on the track team won."
what the hell does that mean? you make a lot of mistakes, spelling and grammar especially and it makes this very hard to read. it is very frustrating to me as a reader because i have been enjoying this story. the problem is, is that it takes me double the time to read a chapter because i have to stop and try to decifer what it is exactly that you are trying to say..
i want to finish reading this because i enjoy it, and there aren't enough good rin/sessh fics, but unless you fix your mistakes and make this easier for you readers to read, i won't read it anymore. i got to chapter 7 and said screw it cuz it's just too damn frustrating trying to decifer it.
i don't mean to be critical of you and hurt you in anyway, but YOU NEED TO FIX YOUR MISTAKES. proof read, make sure it makes sense to you before you post it, spellcheck doesn't solve everything.
"The score between them; all years Inuyasha been on the football team they won and the mourn been on the track team won."
what the hell does that mean? you make a lot of mistakes, spelling and grammar especially and it makes this very hard to read. it is very frustrating to me as a reader because i have been enjoying this story. the problem is, is that it takes me double the time to read a chapter because i have to stop and try to decifer what it is exactly that you are trying to say..
i want to finish reading this because i enjoy it, and there aren't enough good rin/sessh fics, but unless you fix your mistakes and make this easier for you readers to read, i won't read it anymore. i got to chapter 7 and said screw it cuz it's just too damn frustrating trying to decifer it.
i don't mean to be critical of you and hurt you in anyway, but YOU NEED TO FIX YOUR MISTAKES. proof read, make sure it makes sense to you before you post it, spellcheck doesn't solve everything.
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September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
you need a good beta bad!
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September 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow that was great i love it .... hmm what is naraku and yura up to ....hmm will find rin in the pool .. please please please please please please please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now
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September 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
great story please update soon...i cant wait to read more
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July 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It's been such a long time!!!!!!!!! How crazy this site is now...I'm shock to find your story again...I'm always in the Sessy/Rin section, I'm rarely in the general section...but anyway....Man!!!! you're story is so good.....What the hell are they doing to my Rinny???!!!! Please don't let her get rape!!!!! please I'm begging on bended knees here!!!!!! I can't wait until the next chapter... They will finally meet, should be interesting.......I guess I have to visit the general section more often...unless you put it in the Sessy/Rin section for a while...(hint...hint)......update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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February 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
finishhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh (goes on for longtime) pleasssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss i loved it
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February 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You updated!! Yayness!! I love your story and I can't wait for you to post the next chapter!
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January 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm glad you finally deciced to update. I was getting ..... nevermind. Keep updating. Thanks.