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wow that was great .. i wish you would start updatting again i would love to read more ... late for now

angel

Wow, Yura and Naraku are so evil and twisted! Poor Rin... Is her mother so stupid that she can't see how distant her daughter is now? And she can't see the bruises at the freak'n table? Stupid Kikyo... Rin needs to move out fast! The only one who can protect her is Sesshoumaru. So Kagura is poisoning Inutaishou, huh? I can't wait for the next chapter! Write more when you can!

so will this be a rin/sess?

Uh, Naraku just hit Rin right? Nothing else? Cause rape can really screw up a story. Especially if it's poor Rin!

This was a great chapter and I really enjoyed reading it. Sorry I can't give you any ideas on what to do. When I write (which isn't very often now) I let the characters do their thing. Since most of my stories if not all, are third person, it's kinda like watcing a movie and taking notes as it goes along. But you're doing a bang up job so far so I hope you get some ideas and update soon. Thanks again for sharing!

A fanfic with a good storyline is enjoyable, but one with so many spelling errors and poor word arrangements is not worth reading. The plot progresses far too slowly to keep readers interested. Please give a little more thought when writing, otherwise you're wasteing an exellent storyline. ~Angel Lich~

first off i want to say i think this is a good story and not to give up. Now concidering the postions you put your charaters in the only thing that sounds resonable is: Rin finishes the packet she got from jaken and ends up saving the company some money since she does not get paid, Sessomaru offers get get her coffee or something small when going to get her he runs into Narku and starts asking rin questions(what,why,who,where,and when)He already hates Naraku so he checks up on rin alot and/or have people follow her so she is safe things like that. And of course he soon realises he is not doing this because he hates Naruku but because he likes Rin and might love her. well that is what i think you should try if you don't like it that is fine but if you would like help the name is my email address

"Then I'll just keep fixing Toad-servents math!" How's that for the next line? I can't believe that Naraku would do that. Okay, auctually I can. Stangly enough I've said exactly the same thing before. Just can't remember where. This is a great story. I can't wait to find out what happens next. Update soon. ^_^

Wow...this is rapidly becoming an addictive story line. I really love the chat room conversations they al have. Can't wait for more updates.

The only problem is that you sometimes leave words out of a sentence. Like "Okay! Let's there!" instead of "Okay! Let's go there!" I suggest you read through carefully before posting, that way it doesn't come out as...choppy.