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by Sabichan

person LadyCatBailey
schedule February 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*snort snicker snicker* "Its FREEDOM!"...Yes...Only Miroku! *cracks up* Highly, highly amusing. *snoooort*
ooOOoo Kagome is comin' home! *bounces* They're gonna see each other at the bus stop, am I right!? GYAH ITS SO SWEEEEEEEEEEEEET! *bounces harder*

Meanwhile, Rin was cracking my shit up. "I\ot wot wearing panties." "*heavy breathing*" LOL Its like BWHAHAHAHAHAHA YOU'RE SCREWED!...Well, you're not, and its funny! :p :p :p...I'm so weird.

I can't wait for an update, and how is the lemon tree abearing? *winkwink, nudgenudge* I SERIOUSLY need to stop reading lemons...I'm starting to dream IY fics...>.< Serious to God, last night I dreampt that InuYasha was stripping at a bus stop and Kagome was waving five dollor bills. I blame you! :p LOL Meanwhile, he looks good in black boxers...XD

IEeeee, your mom grabbed KR's ASS? Not faiiiiir *whimpers* I wanna play with his tushy...*bawls*

Waiting faithfully for an update!
Much Love,
Cat
person Carrie
schedule February 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I am the best evil twin ever! MUWAHAHAHAHAHAHAH-

And stop blaming me for stuff! I really like living.

Time for the visit from typotypo nazi. “You’ve grown up quite a bit, if you don’t me saying." There should be a 'mind' in the sentence. “Yes, Come one, we don’t have too much time." It should be 'on' instead of 'one'. “I do hope you aren’t going to gawk the entire way, It’s very unbecoming ou.” u.” The comma after 'way' should be a period, ne?

The heart to heart with Kagome and Sess, only one word to describe it. AWWWWWW! Okay, so that wasn't exactly a word so much as a sound. *waves hand dismissively* That's not the point. I almost cried again. When Sess found Inu in the cemetary, that was so sad. Ha, and I love Rin. Sess is so whipped lol.

On a personal note, I did technical theatre all four years of highschool, which was not catholic. I am very happy about that. I don't think I could have put up with four more years of nuns. It was bad enough that my mother forced me to go to church 'til I was 18. Is it just me or did you notice that doing theatade ade your mind that much more cememnted in the gutter? I was very innocent until my theatre friends got a hold of me. I was! Now, I have like the dirtiest mind of all my friends. I can turn almost anything into a sexual reference. There's this guy who works in Law Lawn and Garden section of the department store I work in. He's new, but it seems that despite the dress copde which states that you must where black or khaki pants, he wears gray. So June and I call him Gray Pants. We have nicknames for a lot of people at work, like the Shoe Nazi. That's another story. Anyway, I was clocking out and Gray Pants was at the Tool cashwrap and he said , "You leaving already?" I said yes. I had never talked to him before in my life and he say, "You suck." I had to bite my tounge to keep a very innapropriate, smartass comment of "You wish" from leaving my mouth. I just said "Whatever, I've been here since 8:00" and walked away. I kind of wish nhat hat I would have said that just to see what would have happened.

I was an International Thespian Society memeber, too. I went to Thespian convention my senior year of high school. My friends and me went insane. We were jumping around the hotle room and taking these incredably weird pictures, like the one of Lisa and Katie poking their head out of the bathroom with towels wrapped around them, so they looked like they were just coming out of the bathroom together. We use to joke about being MLLs (Mad Lesbian Lovers) and call eachother Penis. I don't remember how that got started.

I should gad tad the other chapters. OMG I love this fic! *huggles it* XD
person drake220
schedule February 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
my sympathies with the interesting situations you get into w/ your mom. i've been there too. many maany any many many many many times. you need to update b/c the big reunion chapter is coming up dn i need to know whats going to happen. and the miroku scene was hysterical. only miroku would compare freedom to toasted bread.
person shaid
schedule February 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
YAY!!!! KAGOME'S COMING HOME!!!!! I am rabid for more!!!
person RavenShadow
schedule February 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I have tell you I amost cried during this chapter and believe me that is very hard to do. You are a very talented writer and I am more then a little jealous about your style. This is truely a great story and I am both dreading and anticipating the ending. I think it is always a great compliment to a writer when you just don't want to the story to ever end. But as with all great stories their has to be an ending. But incase I am to tired or just plain lazy at the time I want to thank you for writing it. Ok, I think I feed your ego enought for momemoment, again thanks!
person Carrie
schedule February 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OMG you poor baby! If my mother did that I would kill her! I mean people can be funny when they are drunk, but not when they are throwing up and in public. I got sick once and it was not pretty, but it was in a hotel room and I wasn't really drunk. Never, and I mean this, NEVER mix screwdrivers and Colt 45. Oh my god, I look back at it now and it's really funny, but at the time it was nasty. It never would have happened if Phil hadn't have drank the rest of the damn vodka though. Damn you Phil!

It was New Years and Phil1, Phil2, Cindy, Katie, and me got a hotel room. That in it's self was something considering none of up was old eh toh to actually get a hotel room at the time. Besides me waking up at like 5 in the morning and puking all over the floor, I mean all over, thas tas the best night of my life! I feel kind of bad though becasue when we left we just put a towel over it. So we got to the hotel room around 10 or so on New Years Eve. The only person who wasn't drinking was Phil 2. Cindy and Phil 1 got drunk off their ass. Cindy kept falling off the bed and saying people pushed her off. We had to drag her off the floor and she had rug burn all over her back and her arms. Sometime after the ball dropped she fall asleep on Phil 2. She was tangled around him pretty well and he looked down her shirt and said, "She's wearing lingerie." Me and Katie just stared at him and said , "Of course she is. So are the both of us." and he said "No, I mean it's black." Men are idiots sometimes. So, Phil 2 had to go home, Cindy was still passed out, and Phil 1 was complaining about being hungry. Me and Katie left the hotel (there was no room service. Cheap bastards.), "borrowing" Cindy's car (I mean she was unconcious. She's not going to mind, right?), and drove to a gas station down the road. We bought like muffins and stuff. When we got back Phil 1 and Cindy were in the bathtub smoking. We had told Phil 1 not to smoke in bed becasue we didn't want him to burn down the place. So wer're all in the bathroom, The back of Cindy's shirt is wet, and then Katie went out in the hallway for ice of something. Phil for some reason though he flushed her down the toilet because she wasn't there. So he's yelling and hugging the toilet saying, "Katie, I'm so sorry!" and she comes back in and has no idea what's going on. It was so funny.

You actually met the Goo Goo Dolls? I want to meet the Goo Goo Dolls. I love them! And what's this about your mother and Keanu Reeves ass?

The thing with the toaster was so funny! I need to say this though. When Rin's cell rang and she yelled "I'm vibrating!" I had some very dirty thougths. I and I have to say everytime you say you're "virbating"....well just think about it. You can't say something like that around me without me getting bad mental pictures. I will leave you off with a little song from Les Miserables, which I saw at Truman High School, who I am quite certain was the first high school to ever get rights to that play...around these here partsway.way. I love the music fromthis play *listens to the CD*

There is a castle on a cloud
I like to go there in my sleep
Aren't any floor for me to sweep
Not in my castle on a cloud
There is a room that's full of toys
There are a hundred boys and girls
Nobody shouts or talks too loud
Not in my castle on a cloud
There is a lady all in white
Holds me and sings a lullaby
She's nice to see
And soft to touch
She says: 'Cosette I love you very much'
I know a place where no one's lost
I know a place where no once crys
Crying at all is not aloud
Not in my castle on a cloud
person Draco
schedule February 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Excellent Story. I always look forward to reading the latest chapters every day and this story has been a awesome one from chapter 1. Keep up the great writing
person Soranji
schedule February 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
lemon treee. Can belibelieve this time last year was the first time i ever read a fanfic and I didn't even know what a lemon was...
person LadyCatBailey
schedule February 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*bawls hysterically and throws myself on Sesshy* I WANT A BIG BROTHEEEEEEEEEEEEER! *snots on his fluffy* o.o

They're gonna be haaaaappy and have little Inu-s ans and ITS GONNA BE SO FREAKING SWEET!

I truly cannot WAIT for the next update...seriously...update...*whimper whimper* PLeaaaaase? I'm greedy. I need a lemon. LIke bad. Poor InuYasha...he's so...lonely...I STILL want to maim Kikyou. Stupid bitchnaz. *thumps her. Hard*

SOrry this so incoherent. Still on cold meds. Yay!

*Praying for the LEMON YEAH BABY!*

Much Love,
Cat
person drake220
schedule February 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i love this story! its so great!! and i know i wasnt suppose to, but i was laughing during the big sessy/inuyasha bonding chapter. one line-i forget now what it was- made me crack up. but the greatest was sango adn miroku- my little sex dumpling- HAHAHA!!!! i cracked up at that one. really, i think one can use the phrase 'luaghed uproariously' adn i've never used that phrase before. honestly, i didnt even think it was possible! look at what you accomplished- not only great chapters but also freaky word usage! very impressive. (oh, adn that lemon tree? bring it on!!)