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by Sabichan

person drake220
schedule March 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
::winces:: yeesh, that sucks! my sympathies! take your time, do the story right! and that mega mutant lemon (hehe! very funny title) sounds great!
person redk1
schedule March 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I am sorry to hear about your computer. But I do love this story!
This was the best two hours I have spent in a long time. And now
I am off to research my story. I await your update!!

youkai tsuki
person Atropa
schedule March 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ohhh you poor thing.. You have my greatest sympathy. *hugs*
person Soranji
schedule March 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*blush*
person ladykaa28
schedule February 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh my gosh!!! That is all I can say for the last few chatpers that I have read. I'm so happy that everyone has finally come home. Now Sess and Rin can get married. Will Inu stay in the mail room or will he take a job at least a little higher on the totem pole? Will Kagome continue to sing? Will Inuyasha start to sing with her, or help out in anyway as far as writing some of her songs with her or for her? Will Kouga come back? Things were not finished with him were they?
person Carrie
schedule February 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
It's getting hot, hot , hot! *dances*

........

o-o *clears throat* I found a typo.

"I was a more than a little surprised at how comfortable I felt around her."

He sounds Italian. The 'a' after shoushould not be there.
person drake220
schedule February 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
that. was. the .best. lemon. i .have. EVER. EVER. read! that last one blew me away! absolutely fantastic! i think you are doing a faboo job of balancing the serious with the fucking. great great great. adn i agree and support the no marriage right off thing. and please get that link. sounds very amusing. and please please do the skirt/miroku thing. some ideas should not be ignored.
person LadyCatBailey
schedule February 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*blinks* *opens mouth and then closes it* Uh. *blinks* Holy. SHit. Call me Kagome and spank me silly...XD XD Sorry, moment.

The lemons are most definatly ripe for picking, ne? XD Three lemon chapters in a row. You freaking ROCK! *worships* And you aren't the only one who seens Inu as a talker. I mean seriously. XD I need to shut up while I"m ahead. LMAO

I'm sorry this review isn't longer ore ore coherent...but, yeah...*cough* I'm goign to go take a cold shower now...XD XD

Much Love,
Cat
person Carrie
schedule February 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You dirtyrty rty girl you. LOL That was so funny. You really need to find that link...fruity purple dress. *laughs*

One of my friends, Lisa actually, gave her boyfriend a suprise once and becasue of it I can no longer look at Altoids anymore without getting mental pictures. Anyway, you know that feeling you get in the back of your throat when you eat mints? Like that cold kind of feeling. Well, this will work better if you are a guy, imagine that feeling all over your dick. Apparently, it feels very good if Dan's reaction was any proof. She told this story at like two in the morning at Thespian convention a few years ago. It was kind of suprising. Apparently, he does sexual things like he play hockey, very aggressive. Not like bad aggressive, just...you know. That's what I was thinking about during the last little thing with Kagome going down on Inuyasha. Seriously, can't look at Altiods the same ever again....

I also can't look at turkey basters or large ballons without dirty thoughs either. A few years ago, I was mini-golfing with Lisa and Phil. It fun.fun. We stole a lot of golf balls. Not the point. Lisa took us to this church/cemetary place where her parents had gotten married to look at this thing called the Love Seat. So there we are, sitting on the Love Seat, when Phil like the stupid bitch he can be thinks he sees a ghost. He's freaking out and then Lisa starts freaking out so they get up and book it the car. Naturally I run after them not wanting to get left behind in their ghost induced panic and miss the curb. I . No. Not one of my better moments. I sprained my ankle. Lisa and Phil finally let me go home after dragging me to a PLAY GROUND and making me GET OUT OF THE CAR AND WALK. I limped my ass in the house at like 12 am and when I woke up the next morning, not wanting my mother to think I had insane friends, which I do, pretended I tripped down the stairs. Later that day, Lisa and Phil show up at my house carrying a from Shop Rite and a this enourmous bag of ice. Phil put the bag of ice on my ankle and Lisa handed me the bag. When I looked in it, let me tell you, funniest thing ever. They had picked up the radomest things ever and just threw them in a bag. I got a turkey baster, a long green ballon not blown up, a bottle of baby oil, and two boxes of Peeps. When my mom came back in the living room I shoved it under the ocffee table. I had to try not to laugh hysterically.

*sigh* The things my friends get me into...

Oh and the leg shaving went very well. They are nice and smooth XD

Lemons....what to say about them but HOT *giggles*

*fans self* I need to go take a cold shower now. Ja Ne ^_^
person Carrie
schedule February 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Forgot the typos.

I SET her down none to gently, my body still leaned over hers.

Her nails dug into the skin of my back, and I could HEAR the slapping of our skin each time I thrust into her.

“Not so INTO powerful now, are ya?”

Bye bye again

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