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June 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i have read both of your dbz storys and 2 of the inuyasha ones and i think they are great and i think you should update 1 if not all of them soon.
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June 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I think you should involve Sango with miroku kyoto that would be funny lol update soon plz before i die of curiousity.
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December 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Best inuyasha fic here.
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December 9, 2003 at 12:00 AM
actually in the manga they refered to the monsters as Gokuraku-chou which translates into paradise birds. do your research kid.
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December 9, 2003 at 12:00 AM
they don't look like harpies to me. and they weren't called harpies origonally either. in the manga they were refered to as Gokuraku-chou which literally means paradise bird. i don't think they've ever called them harpies. in fact where did you get the thought of harpies from?
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November 27, 2003 at 12:00 AM
HAHAHAHAHAHA! Damn i laughed my ass off. that was so fucking funny. Kyoto jumping on miroku like that? So funny. Yet i would do the same thing. LOL. damn so fucking funny. please update soon! I am begging you! By the way the new story you sent me? Awesome!Please post it and update this and fresh start! Huggs:)Kyoto
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November 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooookkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk, that was kinda weird, twas very confusing 2, but i liked once i got over my supreme shock/disbelief. sooooooooooooooooooooooo, update soon alright? ok! ja 4 now.
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November 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE YOU!!!!!!!!You are the BEST!!!!!!!!!!Update SOON!!!
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November 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Two little hentais sitting in a tree. Oh that was priceless!!! I must have laughed so hard on so many occasions after Kyoto appeared. "Will you bare my child?" Oh that was priceless, keep it up!!
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November 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
"Fucking American censors?" Hmmm ... while I don't necessarily agree with all changes that arde, de, the "Birds of Paradise" bit I simply assumed was their OWN name for THEMSELVES. Icky creatures are known for giving themselves lavish, flowery names (the ickier, the flowerier). So they didn't call them harpies? So what! I'm more concerned about editing than I am about translation choices. What animation sequences were cut out? If little to none, then the bit about their name is simply irelevant.
The story is an interesting concept, but I find the writing style to be somewhat monotonous. Just as an example, try reading "Captive Heart" and compare the writing style to your own. How are they different? How are they the same? What can you do to improve you writing to make it more interesting to read?
The best plot in the world means nothing if the writing doesn't support it, just as you can be Shakespeare and be boring if you have no plot. You need both.
I am interested in the plot, so keep writing. Practice is the best solution.
The story is an interesting concept, but I find the writing style to be somewhat monotonous. Just as an example, try reading "Captive Heart" and compare the writing style to your own. How are they different? How are they the same? What can you do to improve you writing to make it more interesting to read?
The best plot in the world means nothing if the writing doesn't support it, just as you can be Shakespeare and be boring if you have no plot. You need both.
I am interested in the plot, so keep writing. Practice is the best solution.