rate_review Reviews

Very nice story - very nice ^_^ A little OOC - but the content made up for it big time. I would look into the quotation marks though... they are a bit confusing and it's a bit difficult to understand who is saying what. It would also be easier to read it if you seperated what people said to each other in different paragraphs. All in all, I liked it, good job. ^_^

Wow, that was great! It was so freakin' hot, and you never let the reader forget that these two truly care for each other. (::points to self:: Hopeless romantic, remember.) You left out quotation marks in several places, but other than that, I loved it!

It was over all a great story. The writing technique lacked, well, technique, but that will come in time. Never rush when you are writing and alway revise, revise, revise. You can almost never over edit. You can overly cut things, but not over edit. Don't foget to check grammer and repitition. Too much repetition can make it seem like you have no idea what you are talking about. Keep up the good work, though. I love the ideea for this story. I look forward to reading your next story.

O_O WOW. DO somemore Sess/Rin lemons. We need them

AS PROMISED I CAME BY TO READ. I LIKE ! CONTINO KEO KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK. REMEMBER THAT IT TAKES TIME WITH WRITING A MATTER OF TRIAL AND ERROR. OH, IF YOU STILL WOULD LIKE HELP WITH EDITING AND STUFF EMAIL ME. I'LL BE HAPY TO HELP.

TAKE CARE


KIEA