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for When all is Lost

by vampire7princess

person Ashley
schedule July 4, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Man.......... Sess is mean.
But he's like that in general.
But Kagome will change Sess.
She will, at least I hope she does.
Sess will learn to love Kag and hopefully treust her since she is going to be his mate soon.
Well anyway keep up the good work.
person Ashley
schedule July 4, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Can you make the story a little neater.
Like put spaces and give a seperate line for each saying, Like when they say someting.
Its kinda hard to read it when it's all together like it is.
But, the good thing is, is that I like your writing style. It's.... different to say the most.
Keep up the good work.
person Ashleigh
schedule July 4, 2003 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!!! Sesshy is such an ass! Update soon. This story is awesome so far.
person Bsasami153
schedule July 3, 2003 at 12:00 AM
It looks interesting your story, but I think you should separate the quotes and thoughts. Its a little confusing when both are together.
person lil weirdo...
schedule July 2, 2003 at 12:00 AM
hey...nice story so far...great i..hm..hmm just try makin the chaps a lil longer for me eh? hehe i like reading...ya well keep it up! update soon!
schedule July 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
^-^;

I had a bit of a time trying to follow you, to be frank, and the story needs to be spaced a bit better. The idea is a good one, and I enjoyed what I got from it.