awesome so far..loving it!! Will you be coming back to finish the story?
Well, I hope you get this review, since sometimes my computer doesn't allow me to post them or there is an error:
I am loving the storylineand obviously the Rin/Sessh pairing. Cannot wait to read more! =)
P.S. You definitely were not joking about things getting dirty fast, haha. Dying to read more!
This is wonderful! I like the way you write, and it's fun to see Rin walk circles around Sesshomaru; she doesn't have to run, just walk, lol. I can't wait for chapter 3!
I kudos-ed and left a silly, meme-ish comment on this story on AO3, so I'll leave a more fleshed-out comment/review here.
Things I like:
1. Good chapter length. I think each of the two chapters so far is about 5,000 words long, so it's hardly a drabble.
2. Good grammar. Most, if not all words all spelled correctly, and I like how you use "daiyoukai" instead of "taiyoukai."
3. Use of italics, bolds, and center-align. You had the presence of mind to apply these features to your text. In the case of the center-align, this was an AFF-specific consideration, as the text box for posting work doesn't seem to recognize center-align formatting from MS Word.
4. Very naughty interaction between Sesshomaru and Rin. I like how you get right into their sexual relationship and I look forward to reading what do they do with each other in the future.
Thank you for writing!