rate_review Reviews

I still love this story, so much. Please continue! :) I'm enjoying it so much. 

NOOOOOOOOO

Why!? Why would you stop now!?!? Gggaaahhhh!!!

I love it so much, you HAVE to continue soon! Ahhh. I wasn'the expecting a lovey scene but I am so happy. So in love with this!!

Nooooo!!!! You HAVE to continue. Your story got me through work! I read it every break and lunch. Pleeeease continue, I need more. I absolutely love how it's going so far. 

Though, I got to where Sessh takes the scent bracelet off and I'miss thinking "ooh yeah" and then it ends and I almost cried hehe. 

I am really into this story. You have a new, big, fan! Please do write when you can! I'lll be waiting ;) 

 

Really great story. I'm happy!

Please update soon! :D

The ending was perfect, we all know where we are getting at here!!!! Just the way I like to see Lord Sesshomaru, in character, although I was iffy on seshomaru walking away from Run and Kohaku, I did like that you added he hated seeing human emotions... Made sense to me :) thank you for sharing your beautiful mind !

Pretty good! Your writing style appears to be talented and inspired, but not yet matured. From a technical standpoint, I see that you make good use of bolds and italics, but at the same time, I see fairly widespread punctuation and spelling mistakes. For instance, you omit commas where they would be appropriate and you use "too" in places where the correct word would be "to." Using MS Word or some other word processing program may help you catch things like this. As for the plot, I hope that Rin chooses to have both Sesshomaru AND Kohaku. Kohaku's attraction to Rin seems too sincere to be "puppy love" while Rin's love for Sesshomaru seems to be as genuine.

I wish there was more. Such a good story.

ohhhhh! I like the way this is going. :) I wonder if Kohaku will confess and how Rin will respond.

Ahhh! Lord Sesshomaru is back! I wonder what will happen to Kohaku. I liked Sesshomaru's old lines being included. I would like more detail in the clothing, for example, someone who is not familiar with Totosai won't know exactly what he looks like.