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I really enjoy this story its one of the best kag/sess fanfics ive read. Keep it up :)

awesome story please update soon

I'm really enjoying this story, as much as I wanted Sesshomaru and Kagome to mate I'm glad it got interrupted because her transformation isn't done yet and I think her seeing her father is important. One quick thing, you said if a few chapters ago that Naraku was still alive and now in this one Inuyasha said he was gone. Was this an accident?

I decided to reread this story from the start because after reading the newest chapter I felt a bit confused. I noticed something off in Ch.1 right before Kagome heads back for her graduation and she's fighting with Inu, it states that Shippo is on Miroku's shoulder during the fight but Shippo's too old and big to do such a thing in this story.

okay now I know why I was confused. In Ch.3 when Kagome is telling her brother why she can't go with him she says,“I can’t just disappear. I have friends here. A duty. I have a mission to complete. An evil bastard to destroy.” Which would mean that Naraku isn't dead yet and the shards still need to be collected but in the last chapter posted it mentioned that Naraku was already dead. When I read it I was confused so I began to reread the entire story to see what had me confused and even though I've found it I'd like to continue reading it.
I don't know about you but I know when I'm writing (no, I've never posted anything online) that I always to try to reread what I've written to make sure that everything flows right and comes together well. I don't know if that could be helpful but I though I'd share it because I really enjoy your writing and this story. I'm a huge fan of Sessh/Kagome fan fiction and I can't wait to read more of this. I'm still interested in what Kagome's new appearance looks like, it mentioned in an early chapter that Kagome's hair was already as long as her brother's (knee length) when she 1st met him at her home in the future. I'm curious about what the mark on Kagome's head means since it isn't just a silver circle like her brother's.

I found another part that mentioned Naraku is still alive in Ch.5 after Kagome goes through her intense change when her brother removes the concealment. She accidentally hurts Shippo and panic's over it causing her masses spikes of mixed holy and youkai energy that could kill both human and youkai, then it states....
“I suggest you eat quickly then, I can feel the curious spikes of energy all around us in the distances.” The Inuyoukai stated smoothly, “Besides, traveling at night will be more comfortable and most likely hide us better since you are so well known throughout the land due to your travels and spats with the half breed Naraku.” She shivered at the name, if only she could harness what she had just done by accident and destroy that foul creature for good everyone’s lives would be so much easier, so much lighter.

She was looking around cautiously now, with thoughts of destroying the demon spider her mind went darker. What if somehow Naraku discovered what was happening to her, her strength? He coveted the jewel for its power, he practically worshipped the tiny thing; what would he do with her? She shivered, biting her lip. “Where are we going Hiko?” She was handed the ramen with a pair or reusable chopsticks, which she began to eat after blowing on each bite without noticing she was doing so.

Due to my ignornace i messed up with Naraku info in the latest chapter. i will be fixing this to match previous chapters. Thanl you so much!

I just finished Ch.7 and in it I realized that it stated Kagome's brother was going to do something before she went to sleep that night to assist in the next step of her changing and not only am I very interested in what he's going to do, I'm also excited about what change it's going to have on her. I'm also curious about whether she's going to change into her youkai form and what other powers she has. Her brother told her she can form a bow with her powers and I'm curious if she and her brother also have whips like Sessh and if either Kagome or her brother (or both of them) can also fly. Her brother hasn't used any youkai powers or ability's so far and I'm curious about what he can do and if she can do them also. In the last chapter it stated that her brother hasn't been able to show her anything because Sessh has showed that he doesn't like it but I don't understand why he'd be bothered by her own brother being close to her, especially since he doesn't seem to care about Shippo being close to her and seems to like and/or appreciate seeing her motherly interactions with Shippo

I read the first 9 chapters a long time ago, and I was hoping for the continuation of the story. Thanks for posting, and I hope to not have to wait long to read more!

Also, Chapter 10 is formatted oddly. The story has "breaks" in it using lots of dashes in a line. Unfortunately they are too long as it creates a need to scroll sideways to read the story. I recommend editing the chapter to reduce the dashes by at least half. Even just putting in 15 dashes is enough for most people to realize that it's a scene-shift in the story.

I really can't wait to read more of this because I really enjoy it and have read it a few times now. I really hope it will be continued.