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June 25, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Yeaaaaaaaa more story!!!! Good as always.
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June 4, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Loving it!!!!
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May 19, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Ok there are a couple things wrong already. The first of all, Kagome is a NATURAL D-cup so yes she has large breasts, even in the anime she was well endowed. Second of all, and probably the most important, the vampires in the Masquerade DO NOT kill their victims! They can drink deep but they DON'T kill them, this helps keep the Masquerade intact. I know you're going for a sense of realism but this is fiction based on anime and a game of all things, you even stated in past chapters that vampires can use their powers to bend the minds of their victims to make them believe whatever they want them to believe, so no one is going to question you on if this can be done or not.
In fact, by my understanding of the game itself, the new bloods are ENCOURAGED to NOT kill their victims, lest they get a taste for it and go feral and ruin the Masquerade. I know this is your story, and that canon has no say on fiction at all, but at the very least do some research on the material in question before writing about it. Now if this was the Anne Rice Universe I could understand completely, but we're talking about a game that specifically says; "...Just make sure you don't kill the poor bastard. You can drink deep, but DON'T kill him." I honestly don't mean to flame, because it's a very good story, but even we authors have to adhere to some rules of the canon, or else the story won't be believable and we lose readers.Now, as a reader, I can go on a leap of faith, and can see Kagome being stuck in such a situation, but when you blatantly ignore of the biggest rules of the Masquerade, one that even the ROYALS adhere to, that's where I have to draw the line. Sure they can kill any other way when the situation calls for it, but they can not kill while feeding, or else it draws too much attention, and I seriously doubt Kagome knows how to properly hide a body at this point in time. Not to mention I'm pretty sure Kikyo is going to keep cleaning up her messes forever, the royals don't like getting involved in matters that don't concern them unless absolutely necessary, in which case it usually involves the death of the one responsible.
In fact, by my understanding of the game itself, the new bloods are ENCOURAGED to NOT kill their victims, lest they get a taste for it and go feral and ruin the Masquerade. I know this is your story, and that canon has no say on fiction at all, but at the very least do some research on the material in question before writing about it. Now if this was the Anne Rice Universe I could understand completely, but we're talking about a game that specifically says; "...Just make sure you don't kill the poor bastard. You can drink deep, but DON'T kill him." I honestly don't mean to flame, because it's a very good story, but even we authors have to adhere to some rules of the canon, or else the story won't be believable and we lose readers.Now, as a reader, I can go on a leap of faith, and can see Kagome being stuck in such a situation, but when you blatantly ignore of the biggest rules of the Masquerade, one that even the ROYALS adhere to, that's where I have to draw the line. Sure they can kill any other way when the situation calls for it, but they can not kill while feeding, or else it draws too much attention, and I seriously doubt Kagome knows how to properly hide a body at this point in time. Not to mention I'm pretty sure Kikyo is going to keep cleaning up her messes forever, the royals don't like getting involved in matters that don't concern them unless absolutely necessary, in which case it usually involves the death of the one responsible.
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March 30, 2015 at 12:00 AM
well....i'm hooked :-)
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February 25, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. I am so happy you started rewriting it again can't wait for the update