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by valkyrie136

person Anon
schedule November 25, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I love this story!! Please please please keep updating!
schedule November 3, 2014 at 12:00 AM
About your comment rape seems logical to you? This hardly fits a S&R love story.
person Shane
schedule November 1, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I'm one of the guilty ones who read and disappear...I can't get enough of your writing it's so addicting and so good! Thanks author
person AhumbleHalofan
schedule November 1, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Believe it or not this is pretty good. I enjoy it but I wouldn't mind seeing...a bit more poetry(?) to the sex. Not just random fucks and pussy. Be more descriptive in the way you write sex.

As for your characters I hope nothing, truly, barbaric happens to Rin. I hope Mr. S gets that stick out of his ass.
person AhumbleHalofan
schedule November 1, 2014 at 12:00 AM
The day I leave my first review is the day you update. Probably coincidence.... Still good update (despite no sex). To me personally I enjoy longer story with detail and descriptions thrown in; about the setting and the characters. Explict sex scenes don't have to be "explict", they can be poetic and descriptive of the act of sex.

anyway I like your story so far despit the shortness of your chapters.