This is a whole no! No!!
One of my favorite lemons till this day, I read it almost every month.
Brilliant. Loved every bit of it. You made many typographical errors, but it isn't something that cannot be overlooked for that flow. This is how I imagine a demon's relationship with a girl. It's stupid how idiotic fangirls like fluff-pieces out of this.
The erotic undertones were amazing. I would have loved for you to write more on this rather than shorten the chapters. Create more chapters where Sesshomaru would simply go near her on a whim, simply because he was lusty. That would have been even more brilliant. It would have been very in character (IC) for a cold and detached Dog-Demon as well.
What I loved about this is that you kept his personality intact. Most female writers (and sadly, lame fluff writers are always women) turn this guy into a fluff-hogging tool that seems like something out of a romantic cartoon rather than the demon we know from Inuyasha.
Again, really felt bad that you didn't delve into this more (there were a couple of grammatical errors as well), but, for all it was worth, this was one of a kind, honest piece.
Wish you luck in your future endeavours.
Regards, AD from ff.net.