For the latest chapter:
"Kagura flicked the blood off of her fan. With a groan she realized that she had somehow managed to get ogre blood all over her kimono."
I guess she'd better take it off, then? LOL
For the fic overall:
I like what you've written so far. The bit of this review above this one I wrote earlier today; after going back through this fic's previous chapters, I found some things that I felt were worth mentioning and decided to make a more in-depth review.
Technical comments: I like your formatting. You break the story up into logically-related paragraphs at regular intervals, making it easy to read. I also like your use of bolds and italics to accentuate the text in certain places. The use of lines made of asterisks effectively separates various scenes from each other. Technical note: As of 6 July 2017, Chapter 1 contains duplicated text, as if you copied and pasted the text from a word-processing program, but accidentally pasted it twice.
Grammar comments: Most everything is spelled and punctuated correctly, with some exceptions. For example, in Chapter 1, Kagome curses InuYasha as a "necrofeliac," for his ongoing relationship with Kikyo. The correct spelling here is "necrophiliac." At least once during Kagome and Naraku's first sexual encounter, you write Kagome as being in the "throws" of ecstasy. The correct word here is "throes." There may or may not be more like this, but generally speaking, they are few and far between.
Storytelling comments: I like the plot! Kagome/Naraku is fun and Naraku/Kagome/Sesshomaru is even better. I also like how you tell the story from different perspectives, not just focusing on one character or another. You use a wide variety of Takahashi characters without using an army of OCs. You even use more obscure Takahashi characters like Entei, Hakudoshi's demon horse, which I assumed was an OC until I looked him up on a InuYasha wiki. Very cool!
Thank you for writing!
This has me wishing Kagome and Naraku was canon. Can't wait to read what happens next!
Oh myyy! *Fans self* That Naraku! Hubba hubba! Nicely done, very fun to read. Please update sooooon!
I really enjoy this story i have read it twice now i think its amazing! I hope you continue the story!
I love the story
Awesome story and so looking forward to next chapter!