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April 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Lord Youko, I'm stalking you also on this site. GREAT CHAPTER! Overwhelmed by enthusiasm, I forgot to wish you well on your finals! Hope everything goes well, kick ass!
I'm preparing finals too right now.
I'm preparing finals too right now.
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April 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I want more~! There are few decent stories on this site and this is one of them! Keep up the good work and update soon, please~!
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April 28, 2013 at 12:00 AM
0.o master's in psychology?? Holy crap, well my excuse for being so late on an update is lame now XD jk. I will have the chapter up soon, I just finished with my own finals. Undergrad though ;P
Anywho, this story is so good already. It's really, really satisfying to see Sess so protective and just downright kind to someone. Especially someone as cute as your Inuyasha. I have two favorite parts of this chapter. The first was when Sess was training and trying to get control of his poison weapon, complaining about how he and Taisho had tried 'everything'. My first thought was "HA! Of course he'd be most comfortable with a whip!" It's really interesting and a little bizarre to see Sess inexperienced and still learning to do things. I guess it just never occurred to me that he would have to have learned these things too.
My other favorite part was when Inuyasha slipped up and told Sess to shut up before realizing his mistake. I really like how you're slowly getting into Inuyasha's character, gradually bringing him out of his shell and bringing in the opportunities for him to evolve into something closer to the stubborn smartass we all know and love. This 'slip up' showed just enough of his true personality behind the fake rules that have been beaten into the poor thing.
There are a couple things which I felt left a little room for improvement, but are by no means mistakes. I thought the language of the other demon children was a little 21st century, if you know what I mean. It worked because, of course, other children would never and should never be as eloquent as Sess. Just something I noticed though. I also felt like the chapter was a tiny bit rushed. I can't really point out a certain point, but I think maybe a little more inner monologue toward the end might have helped.
If you would ever like to chat more in depth about writing, Inuyasha, or anything else really, here's my email: scarlett.jay.14@gmail.com
Keep up the awesome work, and good luck with finals!
Anywho, this story is so good already. It's really, really satisfying to see Sess so protective and just downright kind to someone. Especially someone as cute as your Inuyasha. I have two favorite parts of this chapter. The first was when Sess was training and trying to get control of his poison weapon, complaining about how he and Taisho had tried 'everything'. My first thought was "HA! Of course he'd be most comfortable with a whip!" It's really interesting and a little bizarre to see Sess inexperienced and still learning to do things. I guess it just never occurred to me that he would have to have learned these things too.
My other favorite part was when Inuyasha slipped up and told Sess to shut up before realizing his mistake. I really like how you're slowly getting into Inuyasha's character, gradually bringing him out of his shell and bringing in the opportunities for him to evolve into something closer to the stubborn smartass we all know and love. This 'slip up' showed just enough of his true personality behind the fake rules that have been beaten into the poor thing.
There are a couple things which I felt left a little room for improvement, but are by no means mistakes. I thought the language of the other demon children was a little 21st century, if you know what I mean. It worked because, of course, other children would never and should never be as eloquent as Sess. Just something I noticed though. I also felt like the chapter was a tiny bit rushed. I can't really point out a certain point, but I think maybe a little more inner monologue toward the end might have helped.
If you would ever like to chat more in depth about writing, Inuyasha, or anything else really, here's my email: scarlett.jay.14@gmail.com
Keep up the awesome work, and good luck with finals!
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April 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru are so cute together! The best part is that Sesshoumaru doesn't even realize how much he allows from his puppy. I love this story. I look forward to watching their budding relationship grow, but I also don't want them to be kids to long. I am happily waiting for them to become adults and do adult things.
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April 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter from you! I like where this story is heading and how you manage to keep Sesshoumaru in character, especially during that scene where he discovered his poison whip. It's totally like him to keep going at it just because it's a new power he discovered. Anyway, great job! I hope you did well on your Finals! As much as I squealed with joy when I saw a new chapter was up, school is kind of important, and you should definitely put that first! Appreciated anyway though, this chapter was wonderful!
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April 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Awesome chapter. I can't believe those kids called sesshomaru a bully..lol. he only did to them what they were doing to inuyasha
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April 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I really like this. Please update quickly.
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April 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Moremoremoremoremoremoremoremoremoremore I want more. Great job! Caint wait till th next chapter
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April 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
That was such an adorable ending. I loved it!!!! I must have more. I just hope things don't get too ugly when the Lady of the West finally returns.
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April 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Awww puppy, more more more soon. Good luck on your test.