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schedule December 13, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Interesting imagery. This isn't something I would normally expect to find in the fandom, so thanks for trying it out. I liked the darkness of it. One thing though: be careful with grammar. In the last sentence of this chapter you use the correct form of 'already' where in the title you used 'all ready' where you should have used the former.
Good job!