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by keiinyaoiland

schedule November 9, 2012 at 12:00 AM
this is really good^^ only problem i see is that you sometimes forget to add in words and such. i dont think i saw any spelling or grammar issues though... anyway i cant wait for the next chapter~ um, my email is dgraymansorrowinvoked@gmail.com if you want to respond^^ i will beta for you if you want. i cant guarantee it will be perfect, but i will do my best^^

edit: YAY FIRST!!!
person Dinka
schedule November 9, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Nice!! Kagome's only good place in a story is as the bitch she is...poor inuyasha, he's always so dumb n naive!
Good story so far and u didn't have many mistakes...
This chapter makes me interested :3
Hope to read more!!