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will you be continuing this story?

I feel like I'm missing out on something in this story. How did they know ahead of time that they'd all want Kagome to be their mate exclusively? It mentioned that her mother had gone & spoke to them before sending Kagome there but it doesn't mention what, why or how they knew or decided they wanted Kagome to be their mate. They stated that they'd make it clear that Kagome belonged only to them & no other males could have her but I don't understand the reason they chose Kagome for their themselves or why Kagome can't be with any other males but them while they can still be with other females. I wonder what it was about Kagome or what they knew (or know) about her. How long have they known of her & what is it about her that made them choose (want or decide?) her to be their mate. I also wonder how Kagome will react when she finds out that while she can't be with any other males, her mates are still having sex with other females......

Very, very good and sexy story. Your writing itself needs some work though. I know this will be odd, especially with the erotic story you have written, but try reading it allowed, and see what I mean. Or maybe just get an editor, not one that will change things, but one that will just look over it and say "hey, this needs to be fixed". One last thing, you tend to repeat yourself, it's okay just to list things once.

Please please please please cotinue really really soon. Loved it.

great and interesting fic nice update

i really hope that you are going to be adding more chapters to this story soon

You should keep going. ;3

This is the second time I've read this chapter, can't wait for new ones

Fucking story made me horny as shit. Love it, purely hot and sexy