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for Summer Field Trip

by Smitteeness

person harpergunbunny
schedule July 21, 2012 at 12:00 AM
It seemed a little rushed :/

Even though your audience probably knows the emot "sweat dropped" you really shouldnt use it in writing. It just doesn't jive right.

From what i can gather of the plotline i like the idea... lmao when you implied that one of tge girls was ild enough to drink because she eas 18. Not in the U.S lol.

Are tou going to continue this? I am interested in seeing where this will go.
person harpergunbunny
schedule July 21, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Please excuse the typos in my previous review... keyboard is going :'(

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