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for Elevator Surprise

by Yashahime

person kristig
schedule February 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Excellent story!!! Always love a story with Kouga and Sesshafter Inu.
person YuiNoTenshi
schedule August 28, 2012 at 12:00 AM
When I read, "Bright icy blue eyes" .... I screamed out, "Sesshomaru done killed that baby and beat InuYasha half to death!!"

I couldn't even finish reading after that part, I had to come and review. It was THAT surprising and THAT serious.

* Goes back to finish reading the chapter *

Oh! Great story, by the way! :)
schedule July 26, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I love this story, and I love how Sesshoumaru accepted the baby with little protest. It shows that deep down he truly is an honorable person.
(oh and it's raise not race)
person Nikkie23534
schedule July 25, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I loved this. It was wicked, and it was kind of fun to see Kouga getting the upper hand on Sesshomaru for a minute. But, in the long run, he did lose. No matter how he feels, no matter that he was the first to get Inu pregnant. He was still passed over for Sesshomaru. He was still the one that was left behind. No matter what he is and will always be an outsider. Even to his own daugther.

It was a great story I really enjoyed it.
B reading U!
person isabel88
schedule July 24, 2012 at 12:00 AM
yes...really good story. i enjoyed it. just one thing; if you know that Aniki means Older brother and Otouto means Younger brother, then why did you still have Sesshomaru call InuYash Aniki? other than that, good story
person Vyper
schedule July 24, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I love this addition to this story. I think Sesshoumaru is the perfect Father and I don't want that ruined by Kouga. Sesshoumaru will always love his little girl and in some ways I hope Kouga gets his ass kicked.
person addiena saffir
schedule July 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I think that having her be kouga's was just a bit vindictive to all three of them. Seems they are all being punished. kinda of sucks if you ask me. But other than that good little story.
person Kyr
schedule July 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I loved it!! ^^
person tritetrash106
schedule July 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Hilarious and very very sexy. If you were to make a one shot series it would be a total hit!!! I can't help but to want more, this was absolutely fantastic!
person harpergunbunny
schedule July 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Lol. Ok that was pretty hot.

My only suggestion is for one style change: "aaaaa *moans* aaa. " just doesnt do it for me. I like sexy noise just as much as the next smut lover, and i think you can style it better in the writing without putting ** in there.

Just for flow purposes, but still fucking hot ;)