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by sanchezdianne

schedule March 24, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Oh my goodness! You can't leave it there! My finger went for the next chapter button and there wasn't one! Please update, I love this story so much and I wanna see what happens between kagome and sesshomaru, because he can't leave because they are mated right? Please tell me I'm right!?
schedule November 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
ok first thanks for updating the story and two please finish it soooooooon pleassssssssssssze and thank you
schedule August 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
But I love my cookies! Great story!
person Rin-chan
schedule August 1, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Kyaaaa!! Please update the story! I luvs it!!!
schedule July 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
ok. the premise of the story is rather interesting. I'm intrigued.

a few things to note: in the first chapter there is a sentence where the perspective suddenly switches from third person to first person, and it's not a "thought". It was a little confusing.

The chapter with Kagome's dream about her father's death... could you italicize the dream? or separate it in some way? I got confused because there was no separation between the "present" parts and the "dream".

Good luck writing. I'll be reading more.