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April 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
love it expecily chapter 22 towards the end
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February 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I'm still laughing about stud cupcake...
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December 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Hi there! I was a few chapters in to this before I realized that you were the author of Kindergarten Flirting. I like the story line and plot. I'm, of course, enjoying the dialogue between Inu & Kag. You have the funniest way with their banter and the lemons are OH so tasty. Regardless of if it's sexual, playful, or sweet, you really have a great chemistry going on between them.
There's still a few grammar/spelling mistakes here and there and every now and then a missing word, but other than that I can't really offer any 'cons' for constructive criticism. I find your alternate Naraku fight/death interesting. I've always thought of Kagome's spiritual powers, although a bit unrefined due to not being 'properly' trained, as being pretty kick-ass. So, I was a little disappointed that she had such a weak attack against Naraku, whom wasn't even scared of her arrows or purification abilities, even though that was indeed what killed him in the end. BUT, I got the feeling you were just trying to "Get on with it!", as the Monty Python saying goes, so you could get to the main theme of the story.
I still like this alternate trek that the plot is taking. I really like how the curse fits in to the original canon. It seems to fit in naturally and doesn't feel too far fetched. I like the idea of this Dream Demon and look forward to your next installment. I hope Shippo will be alright :). A lot of fanfiction readers/writers dislike him as a character or paint him in an annoying light, but I really like him. He's a smart and mischievous little kid who just needs to learn to respect his elders, lol. Don't we all... Anyways, keep up the good work and keep writing!
P.S. I have a question for your most righteously titled beta: Sakura-chan, Oh mighty Master of the Clow... What exactly is a clow?? Lol, seriously I have no clue. Is it like Haagen-Dazs in that it is completely made up? Either way, it's a cool name lol.
There's still a few grammar/spelling mistakes here and there and every now and then a missing word, but other than that I can't really offer any 'cons' for constructive criticism. I find your alternate Naraku fight/death interesting. I've always thought of Kagome's spiritual powers, although a bit unrefined due to not being 'properly' trained, as being pretty kick-ass. So, I was a little disappointed that she had such a weak attack against Naraku, whom wasn't even scared of her arrows or purification abilities, even though that was indeed what killed him in the end. BUT, I got the feeling you were just trying to "Get on with it!", as the Monty Python saying goes, so you could get to the main theme of the story.
I still like this alternate trek that the plot is taking. I really like how the curse fits in to the original canon. It seems to fit in naturally and doesn't feel too far fetched. I like the idea of this Dream Demon and look forward to your next installment. I hope Shippo will be alright :). A lot of fanfiction readers/writers dislike him as a character or paint him in an annoying light, but I really like him. He's a smart and mischievous little kid who just needs to learn to respect his elders, lol. Don't we all... Anyways, keep up the good work and keep writing!
P.S. I have a question for your most righteously titled beta: Sakura-chan, Oh mighty Master of the Clow... What exactly is a clow?? Lol, seriously I have no clue. Is it like Haagen-Dazs in that it is completely made up? Either way, it's a cool name lol.
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November 29, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Nice story man....i love the plot and the lemon...could you update early man dying to read the next chapter...
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August 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I absolutely love this story cant wait for more!!!
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July 24, 2012 at 12:00 AM
oh, oh PLlllllllllllllllllleeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaasssssssssse let him follow up on those last few sentences. pls x 3. Let there be lemons by the tree load.
I'm soooo enjoying this fic. those two are so much fun together. And Totosai, *snickers. Damn he slays me. sneaky old man.
I'm soooo enjoying this fic. those two are so much fun together. And Totosai, *snickers. Damn he slays me. sneaky old man.
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June 13, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I'd just like to say... this is a HELL of a lot of fun and i can't wait for more.
I haven't giggled this much in ages. ^^
I haven't giggled this much in ages. ^^