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March 29, 2016 at 12:00 AM
I WANT YOU TO FINSH THIS STORY.
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March 15, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I think I've read this before but I don't recall when. I just wish there was more because I'm dying to find out what happens next & what will happen to Izayoi
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July 9, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Please update
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June 11, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Oh finish this story pleazzzzzzzzzzzzzze
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March 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
i love this story so far i cant wait for the next chapter
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March 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Uum this story makes no sense. I can't even read the first chapter. It's like you started writing a sentence and changed it half way through. Words are missing in sentences. This story needs to be slowly re-read and properly written. Seems very rushed
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November 11, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Please please please continue this I really like it
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February 28, 2012 at 12:00 AM
okay a wonderful idea and its very interesting, a job well dont im looking forward to the rest of this you got a really awesome fic here
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February 8, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I like the idea that this story is taking. The change for the POV's are good, but just watch repeating the same scenes over and over again. Redundancy makes for boring reading, particularly when reading about the same outfit 4 or 5 times. Also keep an eye on the grammar. Your spelling is fine, but the way things are worded sometimes can be confusing.
All in all, I really can't wait for more. :) I love this grouping and can't wait to see how you'll make it work, particularly with 2 Alpha males. Update Soon!
All in all, I really can't wait for more. :) I love this grouping and can't wait to see how you'll make it work, particularly with 2 Alpha males. Update Soon!
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February 8, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Ohhh, I like this story.
There are some mistakes here and there, but not a lot.
But I suggest getting a Beta to read over your work if you haven't have one already.
Grammar? I wouldn't know because I suck at it. :P
I wonder what would the guys do to Izayoi. Izayoi isn't rich, so how far will she get? If she have debit/credit cards on her; how long will it last before her 'husband' cuts her off of the cards? And if she have cash on her; how much does she have? Or have left after paying for the people to kill Kagome? If she haven't paid them yet, I mean.
Also; I wonder how long will she get caught? The guys are demons, smart ones, so I wonder what will they do to get get/capture Izayoi ...
"But what didn’t know Izayoi had gotten away or know what Kimko going do to make Izayoi"
^ I understand what you're trying to write, so I am now curious what Kimko is going to do to Izayoi.
However, when you're done writing future chapters, reread your work and edit them.
Can I suggest something? Longer chapters, pleeeeaaaase! :D:D
I look forward on reading more.
So please update soon. :);) Thanks!!
There are some mistakes here and there, but not a lot.
But I suggest getting a Beta to read over your work if you haven't have one already.
Grammar? I wouldn't know because I suck at it. :P
I wonder what would the guys do to Izayoi. Izayoi isn't rich, so how far will she get? If she have debit/credit cards on her; how long will it last before her 'husband' cuts her off of the cards? And if she have cash on her; how much does she have? Or have left after paying for the people to kill Kagome? If she haven't paid them yet, I mean.
Also; I wonder how long will she get caught? The guys are demons, smart ones, so I wonder what will they do to get get/capture Izayoi ...
"But what didn’t know Izayoi had gotten away or know what Kimko going do to make Izayoi"
^ I understand what you're trying to write, so I am now curious what Kimko is going to do to Izayoi.
However, when you're done writing future chapters, reread your work and edit them.
Can I suggest something? Longer chapters, pleeeeaaaase! :D:D
I look forward on reading more.
So please update soon. :);) Thanks!!