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for Pandemonium

by synysterstar

schedule April 21, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Since you mentioned it wasn't beta'd, I won't bother with technical notes :)


Chapter one: Anarchy

You described it well, I think.

Chapter two: Lick

I'm intrigued as to how Sesshoumaru will fare in this world you've created. I'm also curious as to how the epidemic only affects those of-age. It brings to mind the Star Trek episode "Miri". An interesting concept, to be certain, that a civilization destroying plague could be triggered by the hormone release of puberty. I wonder if your disease is affected by the hormonal change, or if it's something only found in certain environs.

Chapter three: Pulse

Interesting. I'm very curious as to the inevitable meeting.

Chapter four: Jerk

You're setting up an intriguing world here.

Chapter five: Throb

Well, you have started something that could be a very thrilling piece! It's a shame it hasn't gotten more of a response - I do think you have a very interesting idea here. I certainly like how you're taking the prompts, and - for the most part - using the words in a non-sexual way.

Should you choose to continue writing in this world, I'd certainly like to read it!

Thank you for sharing, and happy writing!