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for seduced by moonlight

by kagomeisawsome26

person Shellnet
schedule April 20, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Nice seeing a mail user on hear that dosent just put they had sex 50 times but what woman wares a bra with a night gown maybe a sports bra and undys to bed but no bra with a night gown but I sleep with noyhing most of the time hubby can get all he wants that way some times ill ware just underware if i need to but if i need a gown I ware undys no bra pjs no bra ha ha ha 

person Shellnet
schedule April 20, 2018 at 12:00 AM

Boob makes you sound like a boob. God definetly a man you changed mid way through she was in a night gown you have her change for bed than blink she is in regular cloths. most of my Criticism tends to be about that a auther has used the wrong context tense or singular plural in the wrong place I am bad with  punctuation. I cant write more than a short poem im more a artist in the abstract but try to keep things coherent

person ??
schedule October 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
It was cute.. but Inuyasha is human on moonless night, or night of the new moon. You mixed it up and said their was not any moonlight and then there was. Just letting you know.
person Vyper
schedule January 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This is a nice little romantic fic. Very nice.