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January 25, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Love the story!
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June 30, 2012 at 12:00 AM
more? pwease?
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February 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Though I'm usually uncomfortable with loli, you do it in a way that isn't overly sick or perverted. If this happened in real life I'd wanna kick the crap out of that guy but, as this is fiction I wanna say you do it well. I might suggest adding a way to break up the story a bit more, like adding spaces between each paragraph. It makes it look scrunched up and sometimes I loose my place. It's written well, it seems a little rushed, but I think you did really good. I think it'd be interesting to see where you go with this.
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November 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
First off I would like to say that I love this story because its diffrent and you have a grate story plot going on and I like it alot. I want to say that I hope that u dont stop writting this story because some don't like this story at all if they dont like it then dont read it, and I hope so see more chapters soon. On the last note I would like to stay that this is just a story not real life that a writer is able to write about what ever they wont and the peopleare free to enjoy what they write so let it go. P.S. I ove how you wite ur a good writer plase dont stop.