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January 30, 2013 at 12:00 AM
amazing, as always!! thanks so much for updating! i know life gets in the way sometimes, but PLEASE, PLEASE, OH PRETTY PLEASE dont make us wait that long next time!!!! we (well i do and im asumming others do aswel) love this story (and your other stories. well see you around!
~rae
~rae
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January 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This great cant wait to see where it's going.
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January 28, 2013 at 12:00 AM
A very small smile lit the lord’s face, and he said very quietly to the boy, “Never forget, it was your fault.”
That was beautiful. Great job with the rape scene and the punishment. Worse than anything else he could have done, was that line. After rescuing the slave, Sess still punished him. I would have been very disappointed if you had written him restraining his anger and being gentle with the slave because of everything he'd been through (I'm guessing Kitaru wouldn't have felt so safe and content if Sesshoumaru had suddenly turned soft. Sess remaining the same, and not pitying him was probably one of the best things he could have done for Kitaru.)
I'm very interested in how you write Kitaru. He's just perfect for Sess. The way he finds himself submitting to his master's power without wanting to is good just because of the kind of person he is. He's slavish by nature but he doesn't hold others responsible for his emotions, feelings, what happens to him. He's a PERSON, which is something rare to find in writing, especially recent writing in the trend of Twilight and Fifty Shades of Grey.
I'm looking forward to your next update. Kitaru in the palace will be priceless; will he be jealous of all the other slaves waiting for Sesshoumaru's return?
I hope you continue soon...tc!
That was beautiful. Great job with the rape scene and the punishment. Worse than anything else he could have done, was that line. After rescuing the slave, Sess still punished him. I would have been very disappointed if you had written him restraining his anger and being gentle with the slave because of everything he'd been through (I'm guessing Kitaru wouldn't have felt so safe and content if Sesshoumaru had suddenly turned soft. Sess remaining the same, and not pitying him was probably one of the best things he could have done for Kitaru.)
I'm very interested in how you write Kitaru. He's just perfect for Sess. The way he finds himself submitting to his master's power without wanting to is good just because of the kind of person he is. He's slavish by nature but he doesn't hold others responsible for his emotions, feelings, what happens to him. He's a PERSON, which is something rare to find in writing, especially recent writing in the trend of Twilight and Fifty Shades of Grey.
I'm looking forward to your next update. Kitaru in the palace will be priceless; will he be jealous of all the other slaves waiting for Sesshoumaru's return?
I hope you continue soon...tc!
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January 21, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting so far! Look forward to more!!!
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December 9, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Lol you'redriving me ccrazy with waiting. I check to see if you'veposted everyday!
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November 28, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Feel like i've been waiting forever for the next chapie!!! Plz update. Been dying to know what happens next.
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November 24, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This is a well written story. I've never enjoyed a story with an OC as a main character before, but Kitaru is adorable. His submission to Sesshoumaru is so delicious and Sesshoumaru is exactly as cruel and sadistic as I would like him to be with a slave. As slave stories go, this is one of the few good ones. I'm looking forward to reading more from you - this story and any other slave/sadomasochism stories you plan to write.
I find the idea that Sesshoumaru can subdue strengths more easily than weaknesses, interesting. It's true, I think. A master can't have his slave defy his control even in his weaknesses. A slave should only have those weaknesses that his master wants him to have.
As for the village boys, I'm hoping Kitaru tries and fails to defend himself and Sesshoumaru comes back to teach them a lesson they'll never forget...and then punish Kitaru for not being able to defend himself.
I hope you update soon.
I find the idea that Sesshoumaru can subdue strengths more easily than weaknesses, interesting. It's true, I think. A master can't have his slave defy his control even in his weaknesses. A slave should only have those weaknesses that his master wants him to have.
As for the village boys, I'm hoping Kitaru tries and fails to defend himself and Sesshoumaru comes back to teach them a lesson they'll never forget...and then punish Kitaru for not being able to defend himself.
I hope you update soon.
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July 31, 2012 at 12:00 AM
No! Sesshomaru you get back there and save him! By the way super echoed i found the story i haven't read this in forever!
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July 28, 2012 at 12:00 AM
...........wow!
umm okay still try to process what i just read! this was fantastic! your OC was well rounded and well thought out, i love him already! lord shessy is just the right amount of nice to make this a love/ propper bdsm story and not just a rape fic! not a lot of people can wirte shessy and make him that well rounded, usally they make him all mean, and that not right! i cant wait untill you get back to the castle, think of all the fun that could go one where you have unlimited rooms to have fun in!! omg! im spechless!
i like the punishment aspect you have done that very well! it not just sex but acual pain and punishment, but still turns on your OC! deffentialy keep it up! i like the under water sence, it was differnt from the usal tied to a tree/ bed, and i belive if you can keep writing sence in unsal places and using the enviorment, so not just copy past in any old room but using all aspects of where ever they are, like the plant and the rock! also using common rooms like the bed room in usal ways, so not just having sex on the bed but maybe theres something differnt about it, and what in the bedroom that can be used for not its attended purpose
and im a bit mean but please dont get to soft on your OC now that shessy has started to like him and if nothing eles respect him. cuz your OC likes been beat by the sounds of it and it would be highly mean not to let him be punished but his master every so often!
and i know my minds like a million steps a head of everything, but it could also be good, depending on how the story acualy plays out to rember that the castle would have lot of servents/slaves alreddy there, and who they react and how they are orded to treat and what there orded to do could be intresting aswell.
so yeah feel free to disregered all my segestions im just trying to give you an openminded view of thing that could be added if you ever get stuck! anyway i have like 10 million more ideas from your normal charter develpoment to extream BDSM ideas so you have my email from my review on your other story so if you need motivation/ ideas or are not sure if something would work feel free to drop me an email and ill give you another point of view.
umm okay still try to process what i just read! this was fantastic! your OC was well rounded and well thought out, i love him already! lord shessy is just the right amount of nice to make this a love/ propper bdsm story and not just a rape fic! not a lot of people can wirte shessy and make him that well rounded, usally they make him all mean, and that not right! i cant wait untill you get back to the castle, think of all the fun that could go one where you have unlimited rooms to have fun in!! omg! im spechless!
i like the punishment aspect you have done that very well! it not just sex but acual pain and punishment, but still turns on your OC! deffentialy keep it up! i like the under water sence, it was differnt from the usal tied to a tree/ bed, and i belive if you can keep writing sence in unsal places and using the enviorment, so not just copy past in any old room but using all aspects of where ever they are, like the plant and the rock! also using common rooms like the bed room in usal ways, so not just having sex on the bed but maybe theres something differnt about it, and what in the bedroom that can be used for not its attended purpose
and im a bit mean but please dont get to soft on your OC now that shessy has started to like him and if nothing eles respect him. cuz your OC likes been beat by the sounds of it and it would be highly mean not to let him be punished but his master every so often!
and i know my minds like a million steps a head of everything, but it could also be good, depending on how the story acualy plays out to rember that the castle would have lot of servents/slaves alreddy there, and who they react and how they are orded to treat and what there orded to do could be intresting aswell.
so yeah feel free to disregered all my segestions im just trying to give you an openminded view of thing that could be added if you ever get stuck! anyway i have like 10 million more ideas from your normal charter develpoment to extream BDSM ideas so you have my email from my review on your other story so if you need motivation/ ideas or are not sure if something would work feel free to drop me an email and ill give you another point of view.
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June 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I loved this chapter but I have one question...How did Sess know that Kit was playing at being a dominate? Did I miss something? I can't wait for the next chapter...