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October 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I like your take on the culture. It's a lot closer to the truth than most stories who take a modern point of view. Kudos for doing your research! ^_^ This is a good story. It's intriguing and hot. Hopefully, I'll be able to keep up with it.
If you want to make it richer, try adding minor details. I still have problems with that in my own work and the smallest things can make a huge difference. For instance, a hand motion while someone is speaking, something that makes a scene more visually active, as opposed to passive. I've been lazy lately and have probably missed a lot of opportunities in my own work. When I wrote my first story, my daughter kept throwing the first chapter back at me and telling me to add details, but she wouldn't point out what. So, I'm just trying to help you add more color and motion because this story deserves whatever you can give it. ~_^ If you want to ask me any questions, I can find ways to contact me through my profile.
BTW, thanks for reviews that you've previously given on my stories. I appreciate it.
If you want to make it richer, try adding minor details. I still have problems with that in my own work and the smallest things can make a huge difference. For instance, a hand motion while someone is speaking, something that makes a scene more visually active, as opposed to passive. I've been lazy lately and have probably missed a lot of opportunities in my own work. When I wrote my first story, my daughter kept throwing the first chapter back at me and telling me to add details, but she wouldn't point out what. So, I'm just trying to help you add more color and motion because this story deserves whatever you can give it. ~_^ If you want to ask me any questions, I can find ways to contact me through my profile.
BTW, thanks for reviews that you've previously given on my stories. I appreciate it.
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October 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
ooooh that chappie and the others were really great sooo can't wait for more.
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October 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Great story! I am so glad you updated the story. I can not wait to about Sesshoumaru and Sango bath. Thank you for updating.
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October 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
really great chappie's, i just sooo love them.sesshou sure like's to be f*cked by inu.(hehhe)keep it going.
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May 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
`the next one will be soooo great. looking forward to it. somehow i see inu in for a good show and tell
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May 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
okay, strange question but.
why was INuYasha raped in your story before he met kikyou?
i mean, couldnt he protect himself?
and even if he was human kick the in the guts or the jewels?
i know you love inuyasha. but to make sessh look like a god here, that can kill anything with a slight touch and a very smart brains.
and making inuyasha the opisite (while he is the hero of the show)
is kind of annoying.
why was INuYasha raped in your story before he met kikyou?
i mean, couldnt he protect himself?
and even if he was human kick the in the guts or the jewels?
i know you love inuyasha. but to make sessh look like a god here, that can kill anything with a slight touch and a very smart brains.
and making inuyasha the opisite (while he is the hero of the show)
is kind of annoying.
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May 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Great story. I like how Sesshoumaru is making Inuyasha work for him. I can not wait for the next chapter. Thanks.
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May 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I dont really agree what you said about InuYasha and Sesshoumaru.
But you and me have difrent theories on these chars. i guess.
But you and me have difrent theories on these chars. i guess.
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May 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ooh, this is a very interesting story so far! I can just imagine all the scenarios and permutations to come! Sesshomaru is going to be really demanding, isn't he?
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May 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
wait, a sec. i thought inuyasha saved them all in the end?
in the anime/manga i know this a fanfiction. but still my question.
in the anime/manga i know this a fanfiction. but still my question.