rate_review Reviews

I have been reading your story and in general it is extremely good. I do, however, have to agree with the reviewer that suggested a beta. There are quite few instances of missing words and misspelled or misused words, which regrettably breaks the otherwise great flow of the story.

Example: Shacking....'Shack is a building'...in the context you used, it should have been 'Shaking'.

"..., but he refused to have them snaffle her away from him..."...by definition (in every dictionary I could find to try to understand what you mean by this sentence, 'Snaffle' is a kind of bit on a bridle for a horse. I realize that you mean something to do with the Inutachi 'spiriting' Kagome away from Sesshoumaru, but this is not what is being said, and makes it confusing to the reader.

This is a great story idea, and it seems well thoughtout...just difficult to follow sometimes, as the flow is broken by the grammar, missing words, misspelled words, and misused words.

Not to bad looking good no rushing it I hope it be taken to something of nice and slow. Good work I have to read more ^^.

Well that de-flowering was quick but I like the fact unlike many S/K stories Kagome is despising Sesshomaru instead of loving him for taking her pureness.

I really do rather like this story, I find myself checking every day to see whether or not it has been updated and I do this several times a day. However, I do think that you should start putting some romance in somewhere, for example, Sesshoumaru's beast could realise that he is not going to get anywhere by repeatingly raping her and forcing pleasure on her and starts to just spend time with her, gaining her trust and such.

I am waiting for this story to go somewhere. I like your writing style, but this whole Sesshoumaru despises her and Kagome hates him and is depressed thing, is getting really old. When is something going to change. R u planning on ever actually having them fall in love or is she going to have a baby as little helpless Kagome with big bad mean Sesshoumaru? I am just curious. I like the idea of the story, but I don't want to read it if it is all going to be depressing and aweful. I am just not into physical and mental torture. So I was just curious as to where this story may be headed?
Thanks.

This is a pretty good story so far. You do have some grammar issues which made some of your sentences confusing. A decent beta could help with those issues. This
last chapter seems to have very few grammar issues. Keep up the good work. I look forward to your next chapter.

He's here.

Who's Here, I wanna know.......

cant wait wait for the next one......it just gets better and better

Aww i was hoping you would have updated.....

Loving this story mate....she keeps giving him a headache.

Anyway Great work and keep on writing

Good begining. It is interesting.