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April 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wow ok where do i start i wonder.... i guess since i have so many thoughts on this story i will put them in point form? Yes i think that would be most appropriate ne?
1) I read this whole thing in 2 days after class... when mind you i should have been completing assignments *sweat drop*. I was throughly addicted. It was a task to stop reading and i was absolutely devastated when i came to the last chapter up.
2) Your ability to capture your readers and allow them to feel all the necessary emotions is absolutely astounding! I cried, i smiled, i laughed, i felt anger, i felt sadness, i got scared. It was all so captivating in my eyes. My imagination transported me within the story, it felt like i was there.
3) Besides the fact that some of your readers wanted you to stop drawing out the story. I strongly agree with your decision to focus on elaborate descriptions. Where it mattered you explained, where it did not you briefly described. Sometimes the readers don't know what's good for the development of the story and, like i sad before, i agreed with your decision.
4) The overall plot of the romance was heart wrenching and moving. It literally forced me to review on it. i could not let this one go. The plot wedged its way into my heart and will forever stay there.
5) You may have errors but that is expected since you are the one that not only write but proofs your work. Your choice of words is also superb.
6) I must say you almost gave me a heart attack at the beginning of "The most probable outcome". I started to squeak and the tears just started the roll uncontrollably as i read about Inu and the 2 pups in graves. I was so mad when i realized it was just a dream. I had to stop reading for a couple minutes to catch myself. That was no nice *wags finger at u* lol
7) You can add me to your fan base for life that is a give. I will continue to follow your works very closely. GOOD JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :)
1) I read this whole thing in 2 days after class... when mind you i should have been completing assignments *sweat drop*. I was throughly addicted. It was a task to stop reading and i was absolutely devastated when i came to the last chapter up.
2) Your ability to capture your readers and allow them to feel all the necessary emotions is absolutely astounding! I cried, i smiled, i laughed, i felt anger, i felt sadness, i got scared. It was all so captivating in my eyes. My imagination transported me within the story, it felt like i was there.
3) Besides the fact that some of your readers wanted you to stop drawing out the story. I strongly agree with your decision to focus on elaborate descriptions. Where it mattered you explained, where it did not you briefly described. Sometimes the readers don't know what's good for the development of the story and, like i sad before, i agreed with your decision.
4) The overall plot of the romance was heart wrenching and moving. It literally forced me to review on it. i could not let this one go. The plot wedged its way into my heart and will forever stay there.
5) You may have errors but that is expected since you are the one that not only write but proofs your work. Your choice of words is also superb.
6) I must say you almost gave me a heart attack at the beginning of "The most probable outcome". I started to squeak and the tears just started the roll uncontrollably as i read about Inu and the 2 pups in graves. I was so mad when i realized it was just a dream. I had to stop reading for a couple minutes to catch myself. That was no nice *wags finger at u* lol
7) You can add me to your fan base for life that is a give. I will continue to follow your works very closely. GOOD JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :)
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April 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I love how the relationship between InuYasha and Sesshomaru has changed throughout the story. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Please update again soon. Oh, I liked your version of death very much but I agree with the other readers who say the story shouldn't end that way.
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March 28, 2011 at 12:00 AM
why do good things have to come to an end?
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March 28, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wow and wow! I finally got around to reading through this whole story, as I didn't know about this story until after you did were writing Survive in November. Yes, I know, it's taken me a while. My loss, obviously since I love this story!
This is definitely some of my favorite characterization of Inuyasha and Sesshemouru. And their pups, I love them all!
I'll have to come back and leave you a better review, however, real life calls. Please keep writing. I have this impish desire for Inuyasha to torment is Kouga and his literal goddess. Oh, and watch Sesshemouru get tied up in knots of jealousy and love. His passions are as powerful as he is and it's wonderful to watch. Is it bad to say that his pride actually makes him adorable?
This is definitely some of my favorite characterization of Inuyasha and Sesshemouru. And their pups, I love them all!
I'll have to come back and leave you a better review, however, real life calls. Please keep writing. I have this impish desire for Inuyasha to torment is Kouga and his literal goddess. Oh, and watch Sesshemouru get tied up in knots of jealousy and love. His passions are as powerful as he is and it's wonderful to watch. Is it bad to say that his pride actually makes him adorable?
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March 27, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I think Death had his moment in the sun with Inuyasha. I would like to think that the two brothers live on forever in each other's arms, but it is your story so do as you please since I will still be a fan of yours even when this story is over.
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March 27, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Nice chapter. ^-^
But... if you ended the story with Death's return the ending would be sad and I think the whole story was dark enough. The ending should be bright...? Optimistic. Well, sure, you can mention Death. Example: In Sesshoumaru's thoughts where he thinks that he'll protect his mate and pups and that Inuyasha and he too would be meeting Death again in a long long time. Or something like that. Hm... Maybe a scene from Death's poni of view where Death prepare's himself to meet our Inu brothers but a scene where he comes and takes them... >.< Not my ideal ending.
But... if you ended the story with Death's return the ending would be sad and I think the whole story was dark enough. The ending should be bright...? Optimistic. Well, sure, you can mention Death. Example: In Sesshoumaru's thoughts where he thinks that he'll protect his mate and pups and that Inuyasha and he too would be meeting Death again in a long long time. Or something like that. Hm... Maybe a scene from Death's poni of view where Death prepare's himself to meet our Inu brothers but a scene where he comes and takes them... >.< Not my ideal ending.
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March 27, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Anyone who doesn't enjoy your writing probably only reads cliches besides each to his or her own taste but it can't be the writing itself because you write extremely and beautifully well. I loved how Sessh reacted and what he said when Inuyasha said he was ugly and I totally agree with Sessh anyone with Inuyasha's heart and soul can't be ugly it's impossible. The love making was heartbreakingly beautiful thank you so much. As far as writing about it in the future or not well I don't think it would hurt the story at all but I do hope you don't do it till the last chappie and that you would also include the pups in it some how. I also loved Inuyasha's thoughts on the pups and whether he has any more or not I totally understand why Sessh wouldn't want Inuyasha to have anymore I mean who would want to take the chance on losing a treasure like Inuyasha but really as Inuyasha figures it really is Inuyasha's choice I mean like Sessh would ever be able to deny something that his little mate would want. Can't wait for the next chappie.
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March 27, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Actually, I think that the last chapter being about Death returning to take them to heaven would be a great idea! I still want to know what happens with the rest of the pups, especially Yuusha. He has to be my favorite author-made character of all time! I really really enjoyed this chapter and I hope you write at least one more chapter before you write the last chapter, because I really want to know what happens with the family. Good luck with the next chapter!
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March 27, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Ah, more delight.... Inu of course is happy to be 'healed', love the fact that he still does have a few marks from his ordeal, faint but there. Da boy earned them!!!! And I equally love Sess's happily arrogant comment that Inu was baautiful before and is now, since HE would never want anyone ugly... giggle. And I love the happy, feisty again Inu topping from the bottom, his mate having not complaints, no... What would I like to see after this? I would like to see the Pups grown up, at least partially so (with some younger siblings, heheheh). But no, I would NOT mind seeing our favorite couple facing that most loving of Deaths, many centuries in the future. Their other loved ones await, and they will have earned the rest. And, is it just me, or has a certain Wolf prince gotten a crush on Suijin???
T'Amara, who also is loving Ban's courtship of Inu in a very different universe.
T'Amara, who also is loving Ban's courtship of Inu in a very different universe.
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March 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I couldn't get through this. It would suck a lot less with a good editor (and not just for grammar/spelling, but also logic) and if you took out the female- and human-bashing.