rate_review Reviews

Great story so far; please update & finish!!

I'm not sure why "onelight" has such a problem with you and your writing. You have only bought out two chapters both of which are rather interesting, thus far. There is no way to determine if your story will be a load of crap or not. As of yet. But I look forward to watching it and your writing skills evolve.

I admit the grammar, punctuation and spelling is a bit off. But I am sure with a little bit of tweaking and a decent beta, this fic wouldn't make a half bad read.

Keep up the good work. And look forward to reading more.

-ArcAngelLove-

Welp, I am going to be brutally honest, there are some grammer points in the story and a few spelling errors (But this could also be due to the difference in the countries we live in...) Other wise;

In the Eternal words of KOTO the Referee from Yu Yu Hakusho "I LOVE IT!"

Keep up the good work, and pwese, pwese; pwese update soon!

Much love <3
Ayame

I like it more or less, the Kaede talks bad Elizabethan always drives me nuts, but you're not the only 1 who does it so no big deal, in the original she talks formally but then Japanese has more forms than English. Just to let you know you have Sesshomaru's name misspelled all through this, it's either Sesshomaru or Sesshoumaru, you have the h after the o, Sessohmaru.