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*whimper*.. *sniff*.. why is there no more chapters yet??? i wanna know wut happens! plz hurry and write more!! omg sesshomaru is so fucking sexy. he's my fav char on inuyasha. that whole 'mine' thing was really good too. ur an awsome writer and u really need to write more!!!

forever spaztic-
Tory

Wow it drives me crazy when I come across stories like these. Excellent plot (considering I'm still on first chapter but had to review asap) but enough grammatical mistakes to drive me up the wall.
You really need to decide what tense you're working with. I'm getting major whiplash trying to adjust. Fixing that in and of itself would clear up more than half of the mistakes.
Also, I hope you explain this later and if you do then forget I mentioned it but, as youve got the plot in an au, modern day setting ...why did you keep Inuyasha and Sesshomaru as demons? Either its a world in which demons are a common thing (in which case you should have made it clear the first time you talked about it) or its a world that makes no sense. Please clarify.
As it is I suggest you get a beta because one could really fix up some problems. If you already have one fire your old one and get a new one.
And because so many people these days think that any critisism of their story is in fact a flame let me clarify:This is not a flame. This is a constructive review by someone who thinks your story has great potential...it just needs some work done on it.

Happy Holidays.

Oh i just love this story! it makes me giggle! keep up the good work!

hickys! FOTCL! <(falling out the chair laughing)

Okay, this fic has been staring at me for some time; begging for me to read it. And for some retarded reason, I just kept putting it off until the other day. I'm both glad I put it off (I had a lot more to read!) and upset with myself as it's a damn enticing story line. I'm loving Sango's character in this; her party-girl attitude and comments is just smile invoking. Sesshoumaru as well, but who couldn't want the yummy stud you've portrayed in this. I am eagerly awaiting an update as I want to read more about the progression of their relationship and all the juicy stuff it entails. Very nice job! You've got a fan.

LC

It has been a long time since I have seen a good sess/kag work fic on here. Im hoping that since you have already captured my attention that you wont forget to update!!! Lol, I know your prob busy, but I just had to let you know that you have yet another reader following your work. I look forward to seeing your next twist to the story and reviewing again.

"Are you f@#$ing kiding me?" that was the best! an i love the way you revamped the characters esp Rin and kikyo

GREAT!!!!! super AWESOME story. ;)

Wow, that Kagura is really evil. I hope she learned her lesson and I hope that Sesshoumaru can get things straightened out. Cant wait for more.

*chuckles* Good one Kag's! lol. Reading and waiting...Excellent Chapter!