rate_review Reviews

The premise here is SOOOOOO sweet! I can guess how the real story ended, and I'm glad you didn't do that with this! I can't be seen crying over fanfiction! XD There are some grammatical and punctuation errors, which can simply be fixed with spellcheck if you're typing this in a word processor. I think the main thing you can do to make it better is to separate paragraphs when a new person is speaking; that make it a bit hard to understand sometimes, and I think that would help a lot. Good luck in your course!

The plot and everything is good, but like Selina said, you should really try a little harder on grammar and mechanics and everything, because it was kind of hard to read. No offense!!!! <3 But I liked the story and I was like, "OMFG, I'm so glad it was changed to a happier ending!" Keep up the great work!!! Can't wait for a future story!

Loved this story. My husband was in a motorcycle accident so I know how bad those can be. I was so glad he was wearing his helmet. These two should have had two of them.