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December 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very nice oneshot. I have little to complain about except for some word choices. While 'clit', 'cock', and 'pussy' are all accurate it does not seem the best choice of words for the overall telling of this particular story. Other than that, like I said, very nice. I really like Inuyasha's ranting at the end.
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November 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
A very interesting story that DESPIRATLY needs -
A Beta reader, spell check, punctuation, and a healthy dosage of continuity. But other than that, not bad
A Beta reader, spell check, punctuation, and a healthy dosage of continuity. But other than that, not bad
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November 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i like it.
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October 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This was funny. I liked the end very much.
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October 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This was odd. Not bad, just odd. I see the potential for a really cute story, however that disrupted because in my opinion the sex scene was described to literally, too directly. A little allusion goes a long way.