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On one line about half way to Two-thirds of the way down in Chapter 4 Inuyasha become Naruto, just so you know, Exc. ("We know. In fact...why don't the three of us take on together. Give Ayame-chan here a chance to see what this world has to offer," said Naruto, as he felt Ayame's hand move to his cock already rising, and her helping him stand at attention again.)

I seriously disliked this. Grammatical errors left and right. You don't know the difference between they're, there, and their. The story is also something I honestly dislike. I only made it to the second chapter when Inuyasha went for Kagome's mother and I just had to stop reading. I can't stand reading that kind of story. And that's not your fault, it's mine. You can write your story however you want to, but I felt like you definitely crossed a line. I didn't like it, I'm sorry.

I am speechless. This is perfect, so perfect...

holy f#ing sh*! how come i´ve never seen this before? it´s perfect! kagome finally gets punished for her abusing inu in the best way, and even ayame gets her revenge - and a guy who knows her worth to boot! the thought of adding sango/kagome´s annoying friends is promising, heck make miroku watch how inu screws sango so the lecher finally learns what a woman truly needs ;-) plus being the proud warrior she is, sango is more in inus+ayames league anyway.....however, what truly knocks me of my feet is kagome´s mom - poor woman sees way too little action - and the thought of her getting knocked up by inu. i can already see kagome babysitting the little one while her mom+inu work on the next XD and who knows, if she continues to be a good girl she might be allowed to carry as well..

You need to tag your story properly. It's definately OOC and a DarkFic. And it sucks. Sorry for the flame.

Decently okay fic, just a few things I would suggest. The first is please label it as OOC, I know a lot of people would like to be warned of such before going into reading a fic, espcially one that's to this extreme. The second is, perhaps this "Inuyasha/Kagome" is not the right location for this fic. Either Male/Female in general, or Threesomes/Moresomes would be better. I'm not sure what the other three chapters were like, but these are just suggestions that may help your readers and for getting you better reviews as well.

Nice fic! I love the idea of Inuyasha making Kagome his bitch! Also like that Inuyasha is getting additional tail, too. Kagome's mom was great, I do so love milfs. And Ayame is nice change, don't see her too often. Hope a threesome between Ayame, Inuyasha, and Kagome will come soon. Though I do want Ayame to get some one on one time with Inuyasha as well. However, I find the sex scenes to be a little short.

Keep up the awesome work and please update as soon as you can!

WOW, SO OUT OF CHARACTER ITS TERRIBLE.

And who cares?

Sango is just as bitchy towards Miroku you dumbass.

I love it man. Its great!

I agree with you 100% that Kagome had it coming. She's a bitch. Please add Sango. That would be hot!

This is also a good for way for Naruto to get revenge from Sakura for being a bitch to him. That's if you plan to write a another Naruto fic. (I hope so.)

By the way I have a new story up. Chapter 1 is out and I'm working or chapter 2 which hopefully I should have up real soon. Its called Naruto and Hinata's Harem. Please check it out when you have the time.

I also may put it on fanfiction.net but I'm not sure at the moment.


Keep up the great work!

If you are going to portray them completely out of character then Please label it as such. Its not too hard to put OC, it just isn't. I hate it when I go into a story and it turns out they are completely different from the movies or manga...happens all the with Sesshoumaru and Kagome fics the next thing you know he is some mushy gushy guy, drives me insane. Nice structure and style on writting though.