rate_review Reviews

while i'm usually a fan of almost all s/k pairing stories, i find this one lacks a cohesive structure, and is hard to follow the thought and line reading. You don't have real paragraphs or sentence structure, suck as quotations and starting a new line when someone speaks, as well as the fact that its just plane choppy, meaning that one second Kagome was asleep and waking from the cold in the middle of the night mind you, then she's at a village, some distance away buying things in the feudal era with money from what time, and When exactly would she have time to have a job in the feudal era to make money there? then she's back waking everyone up to tell them to change into the new cloths, i think this could be interesting, but i think your going to have to work on it to get it there.

Please do enjoy. >.> I have to many thoughts in my head to keep them there. ^.^

it's a good start.. but it'll help alot if you space out the sentences and edit it. and it's spelt *kikyo. try revising it once or twice before posting. but it's alright. update soon!