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July 5, 2017 at 12:00 AM
This is a really awesome concept for a story and has a huge amount going for it. But I honestly feel that it should be lengthened by quite a lot. I don't think that you really do the story Justice by keeping it as quick as it was written. I think you could expand on it into a long one shot and that it'll be raised from really good to incredible by adding more context and stretching out your lemon into something that people will read fifty times over.
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August 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, loved this!!!! I had to than read all about you and and going to enjoy reading all you fiction you've created. This did end up with me wanting more, though I understand why it didn't have more. Your truely a talented writer!! Thanks so much for your work!
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August 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Whew! That was hot.